I hope your muse has not forever fled.

I have checked back every few months on both your stories - especially this one - salivating for a new chapter. I am on tenterhooks to see what happens next, especially The Scene where Kal gets indoctrinated into babymaking, whether he believes it can happen with a "turkey baster" or is willing for a more natural occurence, and is then awesomely surprised by the experience. I want to see if Lois is forced to go into hiding, and how she handles all of the while being Acting-editor-in-exile. I want to see how Lex attempts to bring the world and Kal to their knees, and for what. I want to see Lois meet Clark in denim in Smallville.

I enjoy your style of writing, and the voices you have given Lois and Kal, and I hope we get to hear them again. Wishing you well,

This was so good. Different from the usual. I wish it would have continued. I wanted to see where else you went with it.

JESUS. WHY HAVE YOU NOT UPDATED THIS. GET ON WITH IT PLEASE, IT HAS BEEN FIVE YEARS.

Seriously, though. Please? I read and loved 'Getting Eaten Alive,' (okay, so, devoured it) and then I saw you had another Superman fic and thought, 'oh well, maybe it's finished and he ... she ... Tandrelmairon just hasn't changed the stats to reflect that.' And then I hit chapter 6 and it's all 'Lois and Superman are going to have babies! The Planet is gone! Lex Luthor, Witness Protection in Smallville! Over? Why would it be over?' and I was not happy.

I mean, I love your writing. 'Eaten' was FANTASTIC, I finished it in half an hour and skipped pretty much all social interaction with my visiting family to do so. This, 'Shatterfall,' is the best disaster-fic I've ever read, in this or any other fandom. You are amazing, you capture Lois's character perfectly so that even when she does something that would, in any other story, be completely out of character (i.e., offering to be Superman's babymama) it seems perfectly natural. That is real skill, and real talent. You have that. You suck people in so that they are hoping and grieving right along with your characters. Points for the shatterfall plot-point because it was original and interesting and it worked, and for introducing Lex Luthor subtly because he was just lurking along in there and I didn't even notice until the grand reveal. I loved the loyalty of the Planet's staff, and the way you can capture Lois's snarky, sarcastic voice. I love the way you make Superman/Clark/Kal so loyal to his own ideals and to his parents and Lois's rights, even when he is so tired. I even love that they don't get along all the time, because Lois isn't that kind of person, and they're too tired to handle each other with kid gloves.

Now. You are brilliant. You are adored. You are frickin' worshipped.

PLEASE FINISH THE STORY.

Okay, the little note-thingy at the bottom says to offer a 'well rounded critique,' as it is 'often the most rewarding gift a reader can give,' besides money. Which I can't give you over fanfiction. And I haven't said anything negative, so my critique is, as yet, un-rounded. Square? Cubular? Whatever.

Here is something I do not like about this story: it is not finished. That's about it. Please fix this. The End.

The story is really good and I love how you've developed the AU world. Your writing style works very well and really expresses the feelings of the characters. I hope you continue this story someday.

Your writing has a grace few writers manage to produce. As both a writer and a reader, I thought that should be the fisrt point I make.

The story is great in its conception and wonderfully constructed in its plot development. I could see the progression of the shatterfall problem, I saw Luthor as clearly as if I had read his name long before you exposed it and I knew the steady relationship between Superman and Lois ran so much deeper than simply romatinc or platonic. At the same time, I am stumped about the real cause of this 'war', the extent of Luthor's involvement and the ending. And that is amazing. You have managed to lead us successfully through this battered and broken world, you made us care for this characters and their fate and you made it all without being direct... even once.

Consider yourself tallented. :D

Now, for the matter of updates, I was sorry to see how long it's been since you posted last. Again, through the eyes of a writer, I understand loosing the connection with your writing and having a hard time, after so long, reconnecting. I do, however, beg you to try. This is one of those great stories that deserve an ending and a 'complete' stamp.

Sending you positive vibes through the net... hope you don't mind. :)

I really liked this story, though this last chapter seems a bit off without any romantic feelings shown in earlier at all. I really wish that you would complete this, but it doesn't seem likely at all. Chapter 3 was a bit hard to follow time-line wise though because I thought it was a flashback for the first half of the chapter. I hope you keep writing!

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BUNNY

I have only just been introduced to your writing, both this work and Getting Eaten Alive, and all I can say is that your writing is simply beautiful.

I don't have the knowledge to be able to comment expertly on the subtleties of your writing technique. What I can say is that your exposition is both engaging and emotive and your dialogue has an almost lyrical quality to it. The intricacy of the plot and the intellect behind it I simply marvel at. Excuse the cliche, but I can't wait to see what happens next.

The emotive depths to which you took me as a reader - both the light and the dark - were almost painfully poignant and leave me yearning for more.

Your characterisation is unique but rings so very true and very real and I find myself swept up by them.

Online fanfic simply doesn't do your talent justice but I truly hope you will one day come back and complete this particular work. I notice that I've been acquainted with this piece of writing some 3 years since its last update, all I can do is subscribe to the story alert and hope.

Brava.

You have a tendency to cut dialogue lines in the wrong place. Here, for example:

"It hasn't," he said dryly, "been the highlight of the experience to date."

It should be:

"It hasn't been the highlight of the experience to date," he said dryly.

Or else move the "said dryly" up front somehow.

Other than that . . . Your story has captivated me heart and soul (and body, as I could not stop reading it for anything as trivial as food or drink). It has engaged me on every possible level, from emotion to psychology to science and back. It's been long since I've felt so strongly for any character. Your understated emotion is powerful in the extreme. Your world is engaging and so real it hurts, a beautiful and terrible mixture of darkness and hope. Your plotting skills are exquisite, your scenes work with efficiency that ranges from brutal to subtle, and your language is riveting.

I want to see where you take this. I want to see where you take your writing next. I certainly want to see more of you. Please tell me that old "updated" dates do not mean you've laid aside your considerable talent.

Best,

Tal

This is the best story I've read in...in as long as I can remember. Please, please, please let there be more coming! You're a brilliant writer, and I hope you get published someday - more people than just the online community deserve access to your work. Many, many thanks for sharing your story with me.

Wow. That was a fantastically heady chapter.

I'm still kinda reeling from all the implications of everything that has occurred...

I love your version of the characters- everything they do, all that they say is believable, including their motivations and interactions. Each character is their own person, and is wonderfully consistent throughout the entire story. You write it beautifully, perfectly without fail.

Bravo.

By the way, are you planning on continuing this in any way, shape or form?

This is an extremely good exposition. You have a special ability to link separate thoughts and ideas with such effortless grace. Your writing just flows. *Hi 5*

Only one thing to criticize:

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"In one of his other five hearing-quadrants of the earth."

Just to get technical, a quadrant is one of four. As in, quadruplet, quarter, quartet, etc. All from the same latin root word meaning four. So, really, you can no more have five quadrants than you can have five wheels on a quad bike. It just doesn't work.

Anyways, once again, great writing! :D

Amazing story! Thanks for sharing!

You are seriously evil. That was just amazing and utterly gripping.

But you know what?

I'm happy with that as an ending... it's not ideal but it works :)

So if you aren't going to continue please change it to Complete.

Otherwise ppms lol

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This is a scary AU, the shatterfall seems like such a disaster, one that grinds down on people.

This story is completely fabulous so far. I think the motivations of Lois and Superman are extremely believable and clear, and I am intensely interested in seeing where you take it from here. :)