Oh wow...I love the way you wrote this. So sad, but so human. So real. So Zack.

Each paragraph had a way of hitting home, and that last one totally did me in. I love your use of the recurring pain in his chest...ahh, so beautiful. Excellent work.

Oh wow.

I almost want to cry.

The language, the metaphors, this is so well written. Well done!

omg - youre such a beautiful writer, and that is such a GOOD thing. i love this so much, i dont think i have words that can describe anything more lol ...

You know, I've read this before and enjoyed it a lot, and I can't think why I didn't review it. It's a touching piece and the style fits the mood perfectly. The imagery you use is also very effective. The level of detail is impressive, the way it builds up - and makes the final line that much more poignant. Great job!

Wow. You write some very beautiful description.

Sniff.
Beautiful.
Wonderful rhythm.

very musical.

This fic is really amazing. I rather like how you began each paragraph with a variation on the same sentence, it gave the entire story a sort of rhythm. The title is a nice touch, as well. It took me a while to figure out who's point of view it was from, but that's probably because my brain gets a little fuzzy at this hour. The way you delved into the story without explaination or an author's note made it more unique, too.
Great work, keep writing!