Gah, must they always end up together

Awwww... What a beautiful story. I loved it. Nice work!

Josh I swear I've read this about ten times. Don't know why I didn't review it. Must have been brain dead.

Excellent work with the dialogue.

Good job and well done.

There I've undeadened my brain..

Larry (Sentinel 103)

I wonder why this story doesn'have that many reviews.

I could honestly say that this is the stuff of magic.

Your amazing/stupendous/badical creative writing of this story makes me feel and experience the emotions set upon the characters. Gripping storyline...intensely good!

Man I could only hope for more.

Best fluff ever. I love it.

Aw, wow that was so sweet! I loved it; great job! (:

Angelica

Great story. A K/R shipper's dream. Tight narrative, smooth language, good pacing. A little over-angsty given the sudden and easy resolution (after being so hurt and then brooding for three months over the summer, and having gotten to the point where he didn't want even to go back to Middleton, Ron lets Kim back in so easily? I'm a little skeptical) (but then again, I could be accused of exactly the same thing in a couple of my stories) but really a lovely little tale with a nice ending. And I read it thanks to the fannies! So that's good.

This is like my 10th time reading it and my first time reviewing it. I love this story. you are an awesome writer and definately write more.

I loved it! :)

As is my habit, I follow the links from a fan-writer who gives me a fave review and see what they wrote-or if they didn't write anything, what else they fave. That's how I found this little story.

I like one-shots. Readable in one sitting. Not a big investment in time or effort.

This little jewel of a story caught my fancy. First off, none of the usual grammatical or spelling errors came to my attention that seem to pop up like. I even ran it through a word processing program. The usual "kinda" 's, which are proper for colloquial use. The sentence fragments-like this. I do the same thing in my writing. I think it makes for pithy and emphatic writing. Maybe an editor or teacher would disagree.

For that alone I am impressed. So I will not have to put my tongue in my cheek when I give you my opinion. A lot of writing I think shows potential is flawed by little spelling errors. Even the beta-read stuff. Lots of silly hyperbole. People need to learn how to use adjetives. There's even a recurring phrase I see with many authors: Ron's "chocolate-colored eyes". It drives me up the wall. Do I sound like a snob? Probably.

The emotional reactions ring true. Ron's gut level disillusionment and antagonism. Kim's gut level fear, hesitancy, and belated regret. The painful cartharsis they go through to resolve their differences.

I have only one objection. During Kim and Ron's weeks-long period of mutual silence, it seemed that she would have called on him to help with a sitch-or a mission. But that could be attributed to her fear of a confrontation, and his prolonged absence from the country (over at Yamanuchi.)

I liked it.

Kim and Ron are SO lucky to have Monique for a friend - she totally ROCKS!

Sweet story

Monique really SHOULD charge by the hour. She's got a knack for it. Lol!

Other than that, this was one of the nicest, sappy, truth-revealing KP and Ron stories I've seen in a while. :) Especially for a one-shot story!

Keep the excellent writing! :)

“You’re hand is grabbing my butt.” The only scar on an otherwise wonderful story. These are my favorite kind of story, and you do it masterfully, except for these stupid grammar/spelling errata. I particularly loved how you left us hanging first with Monique's last question, and then wouldn't give us an answer right away but kept trying to weasel out of it until we finally got what we wanted.

That was cute. Teenage angst genre usually makes me cringe but that was great. And your one very good writer.