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LucyMiller
2008-05-23
ch 24,
abuseAww... I love this fic! The ending was so cute.

This is definitely my favourite fic of yours. I'm really happy after having read it but I'm also really sad cause I just realised there's only a couple more fics of yours that I have to read, and then there's no more! lol! Please tell me you're in the process of writing more fics? :)

Did you write this story before Dean made the deal to save Sam? I checked the posting date of the fic but I'm in Australia so I dunno when you guys got Season 2. Cause I liked the contrast between Dean and his father - and if you've written it after the deal was made in the show, I like that Dean just drops his beliefs simply due to how much he cares about Sam.

Just a few of my favourite parts: When Orpheus says Sam loves his brother and Sam just nods - I don't know why, but it's so cute. Also, Sam declining the deal after Dean's pep talk, which was then followed by Sam's "animalistic" yell (that word was great to describe the scene - it really made me feel like that scene actually happened)... and that fight was awesome even though it was very rough! Poor Sam/Dean! I loved that Dean thought it was OK to take the deal but not OK for Sam to. Oh, and this "“Don’t touch me…and it’s Sam.” - aw... so mean, and I love how he admits he didn't mean it. LOVED the Lesbos conversation. I don't know how you found out about it but I think it's fantastic how you wrote it out. Like the part where Sam just looks to the ceiling and says "Lesbians" as the inhabitants of the place while Dean just laughs his ass off - LOL. It is SO Dean. You need to write for the show. Seriously.

Loved the scene where Dean takes the drink of potentially poisoned water and Sam confronts him about it. Also loved the scene in front of the townspeople where Sam says Dean never manages to get upset, sees the hurt, and then backs off.

“Proper grammar is what turns language into art.”

LOL. Awesome.

Loved the ending with the poem (which btw, I'd never heard about before - but I like it now because of you) and LOVED the song at the very end - lol. I kinda liked Orpheus too, I really got that sense of mystery about him and it was cool to see Sam realise just how manipulative he was.

My complaints for this story:

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lol. Sorry, I honestly don't have any.

"I wouldn’t want to do this alone. Even if you were watching…I’d…Dean, I need you here…smacking me around and annoying the hell out of me with Green Eggs and Ham and other shit like that…”

I loved that whole speech and Dean's reaction to it, especially the part where he claims Sam was a good role model. It's just a nice moment where he realises just how special Sam is and is even willing to insult his Dad in the process.

Kryiebess - You are the best writer on this site. Your fics are EASILY the best Supernatural fanfics I've ever read. Thankyou! :)
LucyMiller
2008-05-19
ch 12,
abuseSo there's like 20 chapters and I just realised that so I'm gonna do a mini-review now so I don't forget all the wonderful things I have to say about this amazing fic!

First off, this is my favourite out of the fics I've read so far. Generally speaking, it's just fantastic. I LOVE the mystery aspect and I just find it fascinating how you manage to link it with the brother relationship, Sam seeing the invisible people and then causing doubt with Dean which leads to a fight, or Sam fainting which leads to hurt/comfort.

It's just so well done, it blows my mind, lol. I'm trying to write my own first fic right now and it just makes me appreciate how much time and effort you put into these fics because I can really feel it. I know it's hard and I can just see you pouring your heart into these fics and that's why they turn out so amazing. You're not posting things for the sake of getting page views or getting favourited, you're posting to entertain people and to share these beautiful fics with everyone else and make them feel as happy as I feel when I read your fics, and I genuinely do appreciate that.

I like how you portray the brothers as similar and yet very different. Like that line where Sam exclaims that: "We have no idea what’s going on AND, more importantly, we have no idea how to fix it." Dean says exactly the same thing 1 or 2 chapters before - I don't know if you did it consciously or not, but it just makes everything interlink so well. Not only that, but minor details like Dean sleeping in the car to avoid to the smell of the worm inside the house while it's raining, and then you link that to the flies exploding on the damp floor (due to the rain) while the boys are at the well. I mean, they're minor things, but they add up to produce something amazing. It's the perfect mix between focus on the hunt and focus on the brother relationship. I really think that's the major reason your fics are so easily readable...everything just FLOWS, you know? It feels right...doesn't feel detached. And that's not common. You get writers who don't know how to make everything flow, which just makes me appreciate your fics so much more.

Moving on to the brothers, again, written brilliantly. OK, seriously though... I want to smack you for making me disgusted at naked Sammy. I mean, you'd think that would be appealing, but no, you're as bad as Kripke! He gives us shirtless Dean and then peels his skin off (in Skin) and you give us naked Sammy who has to cut his testicles to get a maggot out! Shame on you! LOL! I loved it btw, but I must admit I was just shocked throughout, lol.

I LOVED the "green egs and ham" bit, lol! Your Dean is THE Dean on the show, it's just awesome. Plus, you make him more inclined to hug, lol, and that's never bad. I loved the fight where Sam shoves his brother against a wall for mocking him so much, and then quickly realises just how bad that action was, and poor Dean was so confused since he was still laughing at his own joke. And the fights over Sam's imaginary friends, as Dean thought. Those were nice. I was in squee mode when Sam fainted and Dean was right there to make sure his brother was alright. So cute!

Oh and a massive LOL at "May I carry your boobs?" - Hilarious! And such a line I can imagine Sam saying! And LMAO at Dean peeing in the pool and the water turning green, how embarrassing, but so cute! I'm so excited to read the rest! lol, I really think you're awesome. So lucky to have come across your fanfiction page! Thanks for another awesome ride. :)

OK, so that was so not a "mini-review" - I'm so sorry it was so long! I'll review again at the end - I'm guessing poor Sam still has another maggot in him... that's gonna be fun to read, lol, where did you place this one? His ass? LOL. Can't wait! :)
Von
2008-04-04
ch 15,
abuse'He honestly couldn’t understand why…why anyone would consider trading their eternal soul in exchange for a life. That deal was so skewed it was sickening; eternity in trade for one to fifty years'

Ha! (grins) Ironic.

*keeps reading*
annj
2008-03-30
ch 24,
abuse*lolz* Great ending for a great story. You made me laugh and cry. Thanks!
annj
2008-03-30
ch 16,
abusePoor Dean, poor Sam. Poor guys. What crime did they commit to have a karma as burdened as that. :-D
annj
2008-03-29
ch 4,
abuseOh my GOD! Warn a girl, wouldya? Man standing in the corner ... *flails*
annj
2008-03-29
ch 3,
abuseOy, that really was disgusting *lolz*.
tanpopo no hana
2008-03-18
ch 24,
abuseAbsolutely loved this last chapter! I really was in need of some overly emotional, cheesy scenes. And I loved the poem you picked - very fitting! You're so talented when it comes to telling a story and keeping the characters real. Your Sam and Dean are among the best! Kudos!
I had a great time reading this, even if it meant not getting any work done. Again. So.. thank you! And I hope you don't mind me spamming you... I just like commenting ^^
tanpopo no hana
2008-03-18
ch 23,
abuseThey really should have thought about maggots in the grave... I mean, that's actually a plac where you should expect them.
Poor Dean though. Ouch.
tanpopo no hana
2008-03-17
ch 22,
abuseWell, I could have lived without the teenagers, but the whole 'playing a game' thing was pretty funny! I could hit Dean for drinking that water again though. Idiot...
tanpopo no hana
2008-03-17
ch 21,
abuseUh... so I'm right if I'm thinking that it's not over yet?
tanpopo no hana
2008-03-17
ch 20,
abuseHuh? So all it was was Dean being depressed and now he's better again? Not that he doesn't have a good reason to be feeling down and irritable, but I thought there was going to be another explanation...
tanpopo no hana
2008-03-17
ch 19,
abuseBy now I'm actually hoping something messed with Dean... cause if that's all just himself talking, then it's gonna take Sam a long while to repair all the damage. At least I've come to the conclusion that there aren't any freaky creatures inside of him, since he should have been able to see Orpheus if that were the case, right?
tanpopo no hana
2008-03-17
ch 18,
abuseObviously you know Dean pretty well... (this was written before AHBL, wasn't it?)
I still love that deal you came up with. I mean, I can absolutely understand Dean's speech to Sam and it's right that he refused, but the whole 'sacrificing you eternal peace to forever watch out for your family' thing is so... well, so heartbreakingly Dean-ish, I guess.
tanpopo no hana
2008-03-17
ch 17,
abuseWonder what's wrong with Dean. There weren't any maggots around that could have crawled into him, just flies... *hopes that none of the flies crawled into Dean's ear*
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