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Reviews For: Pitiful

Gotsta Have My Hardy 2007-06-23 ch 1,	abuseThat was acutly unpleasnt. What in gods green earth posessed you to do that?
Brandi N. Jones 2007-04-22 ch 1,	abuseOkay, wow. Allow me to preface this review by saying I usually read fics in this fandom that present Jack as this weak, frightened little boy. The naive, paranoid kid with the horrible past he is still running from. I was so relieved to find yours. I like your perspective far better, to be honest. He's screwed up, granted, but he doesn't pity himself. He doesn't seem like the type. It was a darling story, anyway. It had a bit of an edge (as well it should), but also was sweet and touching. I love the last few lines about his not being able to break the record because Evelyn won't give up like the others, and how he didn't hide his toothbrush because deep down, he knows he's safe. That's so effective, and so unbelievably cute without being nauseatingly sugary. A fine job you have done here. You should be proud. I thoroughly enjoyed it. :)
jackysgal 2007-03-13 ch 1, anon.	abusethis was great i would LOVE to know what happens next!
NoEqual 2007-01-07 ch 1,	abuseThat was really good. I like how you didn't make Jack all meek and scared. Definetly a great writer. Hope you can continue more stuff like this.
xxdiscontinuedxx 2007-01-06 ch 1,	abuseBroken and angry, it's a good idea. Most writers usually just work with the scared little kid story. Good luck, maybe you can make this work.
Pen Liddin 2007-01-06 ch 1,	abuseplease continue!
Omnicat (too lazy to log in... 2007-01-04 ch 1, anon.	abuseVery good. I can see you know what you're talking about here. I like it. Jack didn't seem really angry to me in the movie, but then again, he was older there, he would have mellowed. So, taking into account the time this is set in, it's pretty in-character and accurate to life. Good job.

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