yay! I like it very much! This is your first? *pats on back* good job! *thumbs up!*

I like it :) A lot. My favorite line is, 'a chasm of bleak loneliness under the sunny smile...'

I usually don't favorite poems, but... *clickerz*

Now I feel sad...*cries*

I love it! You have a fantastic visual picture here. I love that you remained in character. I'd love to see you write a multi-chapter piece about Naruto's mask... I think you'd do fantastic at that. Hope your write more!

=)
-TK