please write more^^

wow. like for real just wow. i absolutely adore how well written this is. Great Job! :D

omg that was so kool! Lol kinky xD so they r pregnant now? OuchieS! Thats gonna hurt :( but at least we'll have us some Riku and Soras in the world now! YAY! So when exactly do we get to see those two again? I miss them... ok well im off! Keep on truckin!

woah yet onther hot scene *blush* lol i dont think i can not read past 6 but ill tyr not to :P

ok to the review! *bat man theme* Ok well wow that was good lots of details which is a great quality in writing. i like the way they lived throo other people thats really unusual. I like the originality of this whole story im really getting attatched to it. As a rule of thumb i dont like sotries that totally go off the rail and r off topic but this was a surpriseing twist i enjoyed. Keep u the good work and I can't wait to read more!

yay for double chapter night!

Truthfully i guess i sorta like Kairi as long as she isnt between Sora and Riku (like in the game gr) lol So sure why not... War time eh? I can tell already this is about to get really good really fast. I really how the emotions in the story just kind pop out at you. Poor Emo Riku :( Sora go kiss it and make it better ! Meanwhile Kairi can get her fill of live yaoi pornographic action! Rofl Can't wait for the next part of the story... I read in breaks from my own writing so thanks! Syill loving the story if you havent figured that out lol :P

Like it? No i love it. How do ppl not? lol idc if a few of my friends think this IS creepy its so beautiful :)

Great scene :D Poor insecure Sora! There really isnt much to say about it other than it was so great! The way those two feel even if every1 hates them for it (and feel free to slice that whores head off Sora! >:[)Indigo eyes... *thinks* who has indigo eyes?!?! Drat! it isnt kairi is it? Guess I'll have to read more... but alas no time tonight!

o mysterious... well im glad you liked my review i suppose so ill send more! :P

the five heroes and Kairi ROFL i loved that... prolly cause i dont like Kairi... ^^ the stupid ho... *cheers when here heart is broken* *cough nerously* i mean um the poor poor thing *snicker* >:) lol ok well i wish i could read more the story just sux me in i mean attempt at suicide and coming out? Wow sounds... fun? lol party party! Nah but i wanna see wat happens next *cry* ok well i must leave... take care!

wow that was hot... lol theres an ice breaker well ^^ its true... that rocked it makes me wanna quit my whole life and read this thing forever lol I def gotta finish this one, its certainly not what I expected... Well off to bed for me :(

*glomps*

Sweetie, I love this. More than I love teh sugar. Which is saying something.

SEE?! I said I would review! AND I DID!!

... even if it was a little late.

*bows head*

I'm sorry. I've been accused of copying other peoples work so I've been sorting that out and then there were the mass amounts of parties I had to attend.

Why are all my friends December babies? Including me?

Anyways! I loved the idea of it all. Sora's hair... amused me to no end. Ahahaha...

Poor little uke.

XD

I do so love Riku's outfit. It is Teh Smexeh. With capital letters.

XD Now, to check out the rest of your stuff! Away!!

Thanks for the recognition for the review.
Chapter 5
I like the addition of Reno and Zack, and Sora's mention of Axel. Love the details given... they make the reading much more vivid. ~_^

Different idea with the wings...

Chapter 6

WOW... Very intense, betrayal, and the loss of another friend?

Hm... What happened to experiments R.1.K.U and 5.O.R.A?

I'll be looking forward to seeing re-vamped chapter 7! Already watching now!

And if you want a beta-reader, feel free to message me.

Hey... I promised a signed review didn't I? Well, the spacing of the conversations and paragraphs certainly make it MUCH MUCH easier to read in my opinion, there are a few spelling and grammar mistakes, but overall quality of the reading has vastly improved.

I've read up through chapter 4 by now, but I see that you've added two chapters to what you had since this afternoon. ^_^

If you want, I could proof read the posted chapters and give you a detailed report on revisions that need to be made.

One of the thing that has changed is the split of dialogue and the character who is speaking or doing the action into different paragraphs.

Ex:

["Actions speak louder than words Kairi.”

Sora whispered as he let go of Riku's hand and walked away.]

Makes the flow of the sentence choppy.

[“Actions speak louder than words Kairi,”Sora whispered as he let go of Riku’s hand and walked away. ]

Be careful with your sentence structure and also the use of apostrophes.

Please keep in mind that this in NO MEANS is meant to deter you. I REALLY enjoy the story, and wish that I could write as well, but I do intend only to assist with such long winded critiques.

Well written critiques are sometimes mistaken for flames. But like I said, this is meant to help you improve, and isn't that what reviews are for?

Sorry I didn't leave reviews for each of the chapters as I was reading them, but just wanted to drop you a line and let you know once again how glad I am this is being improved. :D

Anyways... I had NO FREAKIN clue you were revamping the story... *drools* and Damn... Just my luck to find out you're doing so DURING MY FINALS!

Heh... Anyways, I'll try to read it when I have time. I've got quite a bit on my plate at the moment, sorry. But yeah, this is definitely a great story, and I'm thrilled to hear you say that you're making it even better.

Sorry I didn't sign in, just stopping by after seeing the deviation at da and heading to your ff profile. SO, all's said, I need to get to class!

Laters
~daisy

Hey again. This isn't bad. I'm interested to know the explinations for everything (which hopefully will come soon).

Hey. This is an interesting start. I hope you go into more detail on the sons thing. It reads a bit awkwardly but not too bad. I'm gonna give it a few more chaps before really getting into it.

aw... that story was really good and cute... and i loved the ending! =D good job and i hope you will continue to create more awesome stories XD ^^~~