Hmm, I always liked the concept behind the pilot chapter of Naruto; the pilot itself sucked, but Naruto's background, etc. in it has always intrigued me. I'm not sure what to think of the format you're using to write this. The flow of the writing tends to stagger and your use of parentheses is rather unorthodox. It's like reading someone's notebook, rather than a story. The concept is still plenty interesting, so I'll continue reading.

The story is wonderful and all the scenes have rich language and really great style. The problem is that the presentation and order of the scenes are terribly confusing. It is possible to keep the same style and format of the scenes but reduce confusion by adding in some clarifications here and there. You already have a few clarifications as to what's going on, but what you need is more. We, the readers, are very grateful that you are writing this wonderful story to share with us, but the mutual honoring of the reader-storyteller bond requires that the storyteller be clear so that the listener/reader may fully fulfill his part of taking it in and understanding it.

An interesting take, and very well written! Can't wait for more.

Thank you.

Naruto lost his father's fur..?
I wonder how he could become a student he doesn't have a wand..

This story is really interesting!
Somehow you have your own way to write storys...
It makes the story more interesting... and a little confuesing at times, but it keeps the reader on his toes, seeing as you never know what happens next.. ^^
Wanna see what happens next!
:3

Update?

Will you add a new chapter?

I sure love the way you write. It's a neat story idea, but your writing really makes it come alive. I've added this to my favorites

It's great, but it could be oh so much more, if you wrote this with more of a coherent plot, it'd be one of the best i've read, as i adore the writing style, and full-kitsune naru is a really interesting concept, i'm really looking forward to an update!

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Oh I adore this fic! The style! The penmanship! The plot! ::swoons dramatically::

I've been catching up on my emails (and reviews in my inbox, yes I really am that slow), and after reading your wonderful review I checked your profile page and stumbled across this magnificent beauty.

I remember reading the Naruto pilot years ago, and I loved it. To get to read a treat like this based off it is thrilling. Especially since it's so well written. I look forward with great anticipation to where this story progresses to.

Hugs,

~Shi-koi~

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sorry i havent read in awhile, i couldnt find the story. good chapter, sorry that you dont have much to work with, but that gives you more room to create, right?

nice chapter. this is during the third year, right?

hargid could of gotten frostbite! and using the pilot...well thats a new idea.

please oh please let Naruto eat Pettigrew!
anyways, awesome fic. I love your style - vague and precise at the same time? weird mix!