Not bad

A most excellent chapter. Party on, dude.

Nice seeing this again.

If you're looking for suggestions take it easy on the number of characters. Less is more.

Good goin, Ash. Keep on keepin on.

Good work here mate. Spot on.

Okay... that was a cool sotry... I read msot of it last night and the rest today. Good story... I hope to see more.

It was nice seeing this again. Keep up the good work. By the way, how is putting this fanfic in the crossover section working out?

Not bad

Excellent

Wouldn't want to be Darien. Party on, dude!

Good work, Ash. Keep on keepin on.

Nice freakin rewrite.

Nice storyline, mate. Spot on.

Did you decide to rewrite this because your writing skills are better than they were a year ago? I just noticed you're better now than you were before.