Great job!

that was pretty good keep it up.

This is one of the best Early Edition poems Ive read so far.

Creative way to write a fanfic story! :)

Not bad. I like the POV, how the kid doesn't know what just happened, and probably never will. The rhyming seems a bit forced in most places, though, and the cadence isn't steady. It doesn't have a solid rhythm, which really breaks it up and keeps the reader from getting into it, but some re-wording and messing with word order should help smooth it out. Nice job. Keep writing, and may the wind be at your back.

PRETTY GNARLY POEM THERE,MEASER. I LIKED THE RHYME, CUZ THAT'S THE ONLY WAY I KNOW HOW TO WITE A GNARLY POEM! :) GOOD JOB! AND KEEP WRITING, CUZ BOTH YOU AND YOUR WRITING ROCKS MY WORLD AND KICKS BUTT TOO! : ) -SHARMA S.