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| Jerry Unipeg 2008-07-07 ch 38,  | abuseGREAT CHAPTER! (*x4) I think they well like the deal. |
| Jerry Unipeg 2008-07-07 ch 37, | abuseGREAT CHAPTER! (*x4) Well done on first contect. |
| Gundam Chief 2008-06-29 ch 36, | abuseAn extremely rare crossover that is a joy to read. Please update. |
| deoxe 2008-06-21 ch 36, | abuseput the crew of the Marco in cryostasis. have the ship travel at near light speed, so you have the time dialation effect. after 20 years real time has past they can come out of cryosleep, and then go home. |
| Nomadic1 2008-06-19 ch 36, | abuseI have enjoyed this on the spacebattles forum and am glad to find it on . Keep writing. NTP |
| TheGreenKnight63 2008-06-15 ch 36, | abuseThis is a very good story Bob, nice plot. My only problem is the very very short chapters. Your chapters are too short, you should not split them. Perhaps it would be better if you were to simply to murge some of the really short chapters. Keep on writing, and do try to avoid your vignet-sized chapters. |
| Master of the Boot 2008-06-10 ch 36, | abuseHello, my absense from this sight is over. I just want to say that this is an unexpected and most fascinating turn of plot. I can't wait to see how the rogue ship's crew react with the starfleeters. I'll be watching. Ta Master of teh Boot |
| Jerry Unipeg 2008-06-10 ch 36, | abuseGREAT CHAPTER! (*x4) Time for new shock. |
| Firewolfe 2008-06-10 ch 36, | abuseInteresting time travel for a colony ship way cool. I lookfroward to seeing what their reaction will be when they learn the truth. Lisa |
| Jerry Unipeg 2008-05-23 ch 35, | abuseGREAT CHAPTER! (*x4) I like the last part of the chapter. |
| Firewolfe 2008-05-23 ch 35, | abuseInteresting a new colony in the dune world. |
| Nomadic1 2008-05-14 ch 34, | abuseFar too short! Very good. I'm looking forward to watching how this story develops. NTP |
| Master of the Boot 2008-04-25 ch 33, | abuseAnother beautiful chapter. I greatly enjoy all of the politiking and plotting which occurs in the aftermath of the not battle with the Polo. Where you take this next is of greatest interest to me. However I have some bad news. I will have to quit this website for the next month and a half due to the demands of school. Assuredly, when the time is up, I will return as this story is too good to drop. Ta Master of teh Boot |
| Nomadic1 2008-04-22 ch 33, | abuseI like your story, this chapter however feels ... odd. Something in it does not flow as well as other chapters. Perhaps it is the departure from canon. Perhaps more of the tension within the Emperor's interview of Duke Atreides. That might give the chapter more life. What of the Atreides Weirding module? I trust it is still being developed and troops trained in it's use. An unexpected technology without Federation roots, not that Shaddam would believe it, should throw the factions into chaos. |
| Merciful Heavens 2008-04-03 ch 29, | abuseYour story is wonderful...I will read the rest later... Cheerio, Merciful Heavens |