In desperate need of spellcheck.

Er... What!? I thought randy was gonna have a part to play? I figured the whole thing with Jinx "betraying" the Tiatans would last more than just one chapter... I can understand you're busy, but... Wow, it was like suddenly being hit by a car! Boom! The end... So much left undone...unexplained. I really hope that once you get the time again, you pick this story back up from chapter six and do what you REALLY wanted to do with it. You do both the story and yourself a disservice by rushing it's ending like that. I know you can't be happy with this ending. Well, either way, I hope your time frees up, 'cause this was a fun read.

happy ending! which is nice! but i feel the whole fic wasnt...hmm good, the rest of the chapters were great, but the ending was rushed..too bad you are so busy that you had to wrap this up early...

*cheers* woot! nice!

well that cant be good, and why did Raven attack them?

flippy thing aint she, that Fuchsia :P lol

what did he give raven?

ah. interesting turn of events, gotta stick to this

Not a bad story overall, though the ending did feel really rushed. I understand having a busy real life, but maybe when it calms down a bit you'll be able to come back and fill it in a little bit more, or possible write more chapters, which would be awesome. I won't hold my breath for more, but I'll definitely read it if there is.

So like I said, other than the ending, not too bad at all.

~V

good story. hope too see more of it

Love it! It's just as great as your other stories. Keep up the good work, hope you update soon.

nice update and i hope you update again soon

Wow, that was nice. Randy was a bit of a surprise at first, but I can kinda see how she's fitting in a little bit. I still wanna see Raven paired up with Jinx, but you're building the suspension up quite nicely. Keep up the good work.

I realy liked it so far so can you please cointinue.

Hmm, I'm liking the story so far. I'd really like to know what it is control freak is planning with his buddies.

Can't wait to see the way you develop the Jinx/Raven relationship.

I'll keep an eye open for updates!