It was ok, There were over 90 grammar errors and typos that you should DEFINATELY fix.

You may recall me from DeviantArt - I commented on one of your other works.

This is an interesting take on what happened with the mirror chamber, and what happened before it. Bittersweet, in a way. Very well done, though, I have to admit. It's a pity that Link and Midna had to part at the end... Though it allows fanfiction writers (like yourself) an oppurtunity to write one's own take on it. I honestly think you should continue it. Perhaps on how Link might get back to Midna... Yes... I think you'd do well with that.

I like your style of writing. It really does catch the eye. I hope to see more from you. ^_^

Very beautiful alteration to the TP ending and this makes the TP ending so much better! :) Still, I still feel sorry for Link though... Poor Link... :(

Super Sis! That rocked! great job

That was great, it is how it should of ended Midna and Link are the greatest couple in all the Zelda games.

WAH! This is so sad! I felt EXACTLY the same way when I watched the ending for the first time. When the mirror broke, I was like: "What?! No!" I didn't understand why she broke it, she had just implied that they were going to see each other again as the mirror was still there. This story COULD explain what happened, but I just wish they had eloborated the ending more, so we weren't left as clueless at the end as we were. There were a few spelling and grammar mistakes, but who really cares when the story is that good? Keep up the good work!

AW. It's this reason why I almost CRIED when I beat the game :( so sad. Nicely written.

I loved this story, great job!

THANK YOU! i though about writing this story myself before you never felt like it. Glad to see it turned out good for you.

Nice work. ^_^

First of all, the story was very touching. You made me cry! I like Link/Midna, too, and yeah, the ending... wow.

I liked the last bit especially, the part in italics. It did have quite an effect.

You didn't have to reproduce the whole TP ending dialogue, but I'm kind of glad you did it that way. To be perfectly honest, I liked that, although most people do consider that a flaw, I guess...

I like the way Midna is up tending the fire, and you really got Zelda in character when she's talking to Midna!

But I do have to point out some grammar problems (because I'm anal, as I've been told, and nitpicky), namely the omissions of several commas. Small things like that-- on the whole your story was readable and fairly clear.

The specifics being instances such as...
"The princess sank into the sand next to Midna who continued to poke the fire..." (should be "...next to Midna, who continued...")
"Is there something on your mind Princess?" (should be "...something on your mind, Princess?")
(And on the subject of grammar, I commend you for getting you're/your right. It's tricky, but important, and really makes a fic better!)
""Doesn't seem like nothing, are you sure that you're ok?" asked Zelda." (probably should be "...like nothing. Are you sure you're okay?" but the grammar is actually really good here. You did perfectly with the dialogue tag. And besides that, the line is in character, which is even more important!)
"I'm fine, cold doesn't bother me, the realm of twilight is quite cold since its nothing but shadows, I'll be fine, please go back to sleep." (should be "I'm fine. Cold doesn't bother me: the Realm of Twilight is quite cold, not being in the Light. I'll be fine, please go back to sleep." Not only is the grammar wrong here, we know that Midna believes her realm is NOT made of shadows. Does "The twilight here holds a serene beauty" mean anything, especially following her line about how calling her realm a "world of shadows" is wrong? Plus, think about the Sols, and the fact that darkness affected their realm negatively, too. AND you got it's/its wrong. "Its" means "belonging to it". "It's" means "it is".)

But all in all, it was a GREAT story. I'm very, VERY, VERY nitpicky. You could benefit from a beta-reader, but it's pretty good. Most people have HORRIBLE grammar. Actually, yours is great! I'm just REALLY nitpicky and can't STAND it if anyone uses incorrect grammar. I know, I should try to change that. I'm hard on myself, too, if I accidentally say something wrong.
Really, I pointed out maybe 80% of the flaws, and very little of the good stuff. We do take for granted good things (we meaning humans in general-- we're hardwired that way).

~Amber