Reviews for Postcard Greetings

Reviews For: Postcard Greetings

Sarah 2008-02-20 ch 1, anon.	abuseThis was an amazing peices. (And the lack of quotations? Where you didn't have them - it worked.) I loved the perspective on Al. Normally you don't really dwell on the obsession - so when one read's the pieces about it, they just hit a certain spot. I was totally feeling for Al. It was maddening. You had him so crazy in a more subtle way. (Not too too subtle, but subtle enough)
KatsyKat 2008-01-16 ch 1,	abuseWOw... I must say - this seems both a WAY ooc for Al and at the same time completly... almost too close to his true nature. I must admit the closeness of the brothers relationship (because of the sacrifices they choose to make for one another) could absolutly become their biggest crutch for future relationships. Really the progression of Al's behavoir was brilliant! Wonderfully done!
indigo's ocean 2007-07-25 ch 1,	abuseOh God... That's the first thing I said after reading this story. Because it was so awful how Al was digging his own grave with worry for his brother, and how he couldn't concentrate on what really mattered - the present - with Winry and Pinako and his new family... and it was really heart-wrenching how he couldn't focus on anything. And I knew it was going to end up like that - with Al sacrificing everything and Ed not being harmed at all and... -cries- Anyway, your story was amazing. And I liked your choice to leave out the quotation marks; it kind of added more emphasis. Poor Alphonse... -sigh- Haha, I loved it. I think I love angst a bit too much. ~indigo
hiya24 2007-03-31 ch 1,	abuseOk, that was just so.. Oh Henry perfect, really reminds me of his Gift of the Magi story. I did like how you didn't use quotation marks, just made the story that more memorable, Great Job =)
Deltana 2007-03-18 ch 1,	abuseWow. There's not really much to say, expect that it was beautiful. I espceially love the rather abrupt and almost detached conclusion. And what a way to get into Al's mind as his worry steadily climbs for Edo. As I said, wow. You were right in that for stylistic purposes, it made more sense to disclude those quotation marks, and surprisingly, it made the story flow together all more. Excellent job! ^.^
rigella404 2007-03-18 ch 1,	abuseHoshit, love it. Depp's still not all that.
Xx Trinity xX 2007-01-30 ch 1,	abusePoor Al! (This has to be the hundreth time I've written that today! ^^) He really had worked himself up this time, hasn't he? :( i feel so sad for him and Winry. ^^ good job, though. LOL
Decce 2007-01-25 ch 1,	abuseoh my god. that was an incredible story ;). you were right. leaving the quotations out until the phone call makes the story very stylistic and real. it rings out like a drama playing inside al's head, and the quotations at the end add extra emphasis and make you go - "oh my god!". youre such a great writer! - decce
Pajaro Negro 2007-01-14 ch 1,	abuseVery cool. I love your style. You made a right choice with the missing quotation marks. It makes the dialog sound like internal dialog - a nice contrast to the phone call with Ed at the end.
InuyashaLuver1224 2007-01-14 ch 1,	abuseThat was great
Noseless Wonder 2007-01-13 ch 1,	abuseI would like to read another part, mostly because it doesn't feel like there was any conclusion or resolution. I liked the premise of the story. I think you did justice to the way Al would feel not knowing his brother's state of health. The one argument I would make is that I don't think Al would let Winry go like that, especially almost eight months pregnant. For how protective he is over Ed at times, I would imagine that over-protective nature would transfer to other important people in his life... particularly his wife. Not only that, but of anyone in their lives, I think that Winry would understand their tight relationship the best and would probably be the most sympathetic of Al's concern. (Although, it also makes sense that she would get impatient so soon after their wedding) That being said, I could definately see him feeling guilty over this situation and I could imagine it getting in the way of his new marriage. I just can't picture him allowing the situation to remain the way this fic ended. Maybe that's why the ending felt incomplete to me. Keeping in mind that this is 100 percent my own opinion, I really would like to read some sort of resolution. I understand that writing often mirrors real life in a sense. Conflict is easy - resolution can be hard. Sometimes writing resolution can feel rushed or cheesy, so I understand if you are content with keeping this a one-shot. To be fair, I'm sort of biased anyway. I'm a rare breed of Al/Winry fans and they get a very small portion of the FMA fandom. I like angst, but I love romance when it comes to this couple. As far as the actual text, I didn't get the feeling that the lack of quotation marks interrupted anything. For large blocks of text, or important dialogue, it could lead to confusion, but writing it the way you did this time created the effect I believe you were aiming for. I wasn't looking carefully for errors, but nothing struck me as being horribly wrong. (I'm usually a stickler for those things) The progression was smooth and the description was more than adequate. It wasn't rushed, but you didn't ramble on with it either.
JChrys 2007-01-13 ch 1,	abuseLiked it. Liked it a lot. For some reason, I could picture something like this happening... The lack of quotations worked well for this story - fit the feel of it nicely.
Michi P. 2007-01-13 ch 1,	abuseOuch, I think the irony just stabbed me in the gut. Seriously. Once again, WONDERFUL writing and style. I LOVE the fact that you didn't put quotations on some things. If anyone leaves a comment about that, just tell me and I'll get my vicious dog to attack them. Anyway, great job! Can't wait for another chapter (for any of your stories) soon! ~Michi P.
Child of a Pineapple 2007-01-13 ch 1,	abuseAll I'm saying is, Ed had better slap some sense into that boy. Oh, but I really, really liked this. Poor Winry, never gets what she wants, does she? Except, if I was her, instead of leaving I'd just grab the meat cleaver, and... Well, you can guess the rest. God, Al can be such a little brat. --mumbles about various methods of torture-- But yeah, I liked the lack of quotes -- it felt detached, and it fit well. So...yep. Great job!

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