I really like this couple.
Who is the competition?
And why is this a Oneshot?

Cool.

Great story! I love the insight you put into Pietro. Very well written!

AW! That's so sweet. If Evo Pietro wasn't so annoying I would snuggle the imaginary plushie everyone seems to have!

But because he is, I'll just cut off it's head with a chain-saw and light the insides on fire. *blinks*

This storie works in so many levels. I think it was adorably writen and there were parts that were incontrolably cute, like
"Except one thing, one tiny thing he hates about her.She’s dating someone."
I loved it to death. In fact is one of my favorite peaces that you have done so far.
*adds to favorites*

Very cute. It sounds like Pietro. :-)

aw it was so cute! i loved his little obsessiveness. even if it was a tad bit weird. and i liked how u didn't make it that AU. i wish i had my own stalker...not. h/o while i have a borat moment.

i wish i did NOT! have a stalker.

newho. i hope u have other little random idears!

I have to say, you seem very motivated to write lately! I like it a lot when you write a lot! :D

This was a great introspective shot of Pietro. He has such a strong character that - I think - would be pretty hard to write. He has a very rough exterior that involves arrogance, being snobby, seemingly uncaring...and very cowardly at times...but at the same time, there just seems to be so much more bursting at the seems with him. All of the possibilities on what to do with him are totally endless. Except for when people make him gay. I don't like that.
Anyhow, I guess the point of that big fat ramble was to say that I think you grasped his character very well. You showed that there was so much more to him; you drew all of the parallels on how he acts on the outside as opposed to what he is really thinking. You also gave some substance on the couple of X-ietro, rather than showing that they are a complete fanon couple that was thrown together for the hell of it. You make it seem more believable.

It was also very, very apparent that you didn't use Julian's name even though he was referred to so much. That really shows not only Pietro's blatant dislike for him, but also his standoffish-ness (Lol, I'm sorry!) when it comes to Laura and Julian's relationship. That was a very good moodsetter there.

I also think that having no appearance by any other character, and having it only in Pietro's POV with no actions, was very affective. It showed how much emotion that Pietro has, and much, much more dimension to his character.

Once again, an excellent piece of fiction from you! I feel spoiled getting to read all this great stuff this past few weeks! Thank you, oh lord of the X-Men fanfic! Write more soon!

Kristen

Hehhe, I wonder which BoM knows about Pietro stalking X... and this is rather creepy... the way Pietro's stalking X-23... like a creepy stalker... lol. It's great though, I liked it. ^_^