Not that much of crossover at the moment, though it seems the moment have been frozen and now stretches to eternity... After all, there have been no updates for a long long time...
Frankly, I don't know what Gold Digger is, but this fic is good and I hope you'll continue it some day.

Damn, this thing is slow. At this rate it will take forever to get anywhere. Wonderful detail level, huge chapters, nice development... Still, you promise much and give little in the way of Gold Diggers.

I believe that was Ancient Jina.

The fathers ever going a bar is a fanon. Akane Airways is a fanon. Mallet being Akane's main tool is a fanon: she'd more likely just punt Ranma in this scene.

Kinda nice.. Hope you continue this soon

This is my furst time reading a Ranma story ever and I seem to like RanmaXNabiki a lot just because they are my fave charictors in the searies and you are doing a realy good job so when you can pleas update this story because ti is awsom in my opinion because of the depth you put into the plot.So pleas keep up the good work.

like it

I thought of a couple more suggestions. If you add a scene with Ranma freaking over a cat after that Tea scene with Elder-Gina that would open the door for explaining the Neko-ken and let her drop the Egypt hint.

That would start to add emphasis to trying to get to that part of the world on the Training trip. Putting Cousteau's invitation after that even with the stress relief from dancing will help on the incentive aspect for Ranma still making that trip.

Another thing in other chapters I think you might want to add back in is the Nabiki and Love Hotel scene where Ryouga catches them out front. After the dancing there's more than enough interest and with the behavior at school regarding Ukyo and Akane there's plenty of reason for them to want to stay incognito to do other things. Maybe even include another dance club trip during it where Nabiki is playing a guy and Ranma-chan is in that Tube top outfit. There are some things that just would not work right in Love of Cheetah without it.

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Well I read through all the chapters I saw in the profile associated with Battle Mage.

There are allot of great things in it including your use of Older Gina. I'm having a little trouble with your time line though.

The confrontation with Soun about the cask of water doesn't have the right emphasis unless it happens the day after the wedding. The Dance club things are great but they are too soon after the wedding. While Ranma needs the stress relief he still hasn't gotten any chance to unwind from Jusendo. If you keep the argument the night after the failed wedding and then have the Kuno confrontation with the broken ribs and the Ukyo bits on the day after with the other things moved to later it would make more sense to me.

In a way right now you have stress relief before you've finished the Fallout. It's making things disjointed. You have a quarter year from what you said time wise before the end of this Furinkan year. So just to clarify I'd think of a time line that is a bit different.

Start with the failed wedding. The bathroom scene is a bit much this soon but an argument with Nabiki about her involvement in the wedding fits well. Save the tub scene for later. Some introduction to Ranma's hidden personality will help it fit better later on.

Next Morning have the confrontation with Soun followed by Kuno claiming rights over Saotome-Tendo affairs and the beating along with the Nabiki bleacher scene. If this is Monday. Having U-chan having to take a day off really hurts her credibility in being clueless as to Ranma ignoring her notes, but it should happen before you get into the Dance club.

Really saving the Club until the week after the failed wedding gives time for Ranma's stress to be clearly shown and worries to mount for Nabiki. Also the time with the club makes more sense than the Party with the aphrodisiac micky Nabs was slipped. That kind of party fits more with the College scene or after finals of a given school year. The 3 times helping her with her arousal in that were also too much, so I'm glad it's not there even if I liked the Ranma to the Rescue angle.

The Amazons in all the drafts I have seen have the common sense to lay low after that blow out in the Dojo. So really after U-chan is told off it's ok for the Dance Club.

The Bath Tub scene keeps popping up in my mind though. The grope of Nabiki's posterior. The eyebrow wiggle and other suggestive parts seem over the top even for a joke. It's more the behavior I'd expect from Sailor Moon's Tenoh Haruka/Uranus than Ranma for any reason. It's an interesing scene I just wish I could say where or when I'd think it could fit. Because without the Party that behavior just doesn't fit that well but the Party doesn't help the rest of the prequil. Just saying Genma was far from celibate isn't enough for Ranma to drop his act like that.

It would help if this covers at least a whole month after the failed wedding. Even with the "Gaijin" Cousteau showing up I think it said a week after the failed wedding in the other story that isn't enough breathing room. 2 weeks lets all you have now have space to happen and still leave Akane with her misconceptions. Also after the school year ends there's a break before the next can begin. Plenty of time for Nabiki's Apartment quest and more time for Ranma to get to spend not just in Paris but also on the Veldt with the Were-Cheetahs The story you seemed to make it sound like it was 3 months with them and also the same time for the whole training trip. It left no time for Cousteau's wedding nor the trip and research in Egypt.

I wouldn't mind if Elder-Gina dropped a hint or two getting Ranma onto the path where he can find that info. It just seemed too convenient before.

Well here's hoping that things can be ironed out and you soon update with the chapter showing if Xian-Pu survives Mu-Tzu's knife going through her. Sorry if I caused much confusion in mentioning the other stories too much but I hope my suggestions help anyway.

Daniel Thomas Stack

I like it. When I started I wasn't expecting anything but a short prelude, but you've created a good idea for a 'what's next' that I can definitly get behind. Its thorough, well written, and logical. In total I hope you update and keep going.

GOod read, looking forward to more.

Great story, however, there is still the issue of the day(s) and actions of the honor-calling scene between Ranma and Soun. Mostly you put that the wedding was "yesturday" when it was at least 2 or 3 days prior. This is showing a laziness on your part and some readers might call you on it (like me :P). Also, check the Kasumi part at the end of that scene too. It doesn't fit with "this" version of the Cheeta-girl.

I don't know the GoldDiggers series...at all except for what people put in the fanfics, but I like what you have so far. I would have hinted to...otherworldly places, even in minor.

Suggestions for next chapter:
)More kissing scenes between Ranma and Nabiki, maybe one with Kasumi (girl to girl), even if it's just an accident.
)Ranma gets knocked (by mallet-sama) to the library and starts researching being emacipated(sp?).
)And Gina shows a little too much skin to Ranma.

I look forward to next chapter.

Great Story.
I hope you will continual with it. Not sure where Battle Mage or Love of a Cheetah comes into play, but i have faith that it will. It has been while since I read a good written Ranma Fanfic, and hope like most this one doesn't end before it even really started.
What I like about your story is the great chemistry that is slowly, or quickly it depends on how you look at it, between Ranma and Nabiki. A little OOC but without that we would just be reading a written version of the comic.
Good luck keep the muse under the whip!
RobertW

Excellent story, i hope you continue it.

lots of fun, hope the next one doesnt take 7 months to get to me.

Great chapter!!Please comtimue to UPDATE!

i feared another story with the typical Diggers-device:

take ranma
put him into another universe
meet the diggers
britany falling for the jock
etc...

to my surprise you made the meetingpoints brief and constructive.
for the OOc ranma i am quiet grateful and hope that you will develope him into a maturing person with experience, wisdom and character that make more then a few choices.
so far the story did only tell a few days. so i think its high time for the NWC to find out and start chasing and giving more than a bit trouble to the friends.
and if you have something new to surprise us old readers than go on and post it. i am always eager to see new plots and more...


thank you for the entertainment