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Kurt Baros aka The Falcon
2009-09-08 . chapter 9
plz update soon this was very funny story
AiSard
2009-08-08 . chapter 9
hilarious lol. hope you update soon~ want to see whats become of the Amazons and how Ranma'll react when everything comes to light =p
Xiao Ahrima
2009-07-10 . chapter 9
Whoop! Good stuff! Lovin the action and I can't wait to see what happens at the Joketsuzoku reserve, please update soon! >.> Or send me an eta for the next chapter, either works. But! Your writings are well received! Much thanks!
Cat on a Shtick
2009-06-25 . chapter 9
Another good one Weebee. Only have to comment that I thought the one catgirl, already forgot the name, was going to follow Ranma, and have her way with her. I really do wish to know you get Ranma shagged at least once, or cause tease ur readers with it.
HCVquizibo
2009-06-16 . chapter 1
locking ladle
TegwenielWestwind
2009-06-10 . chapter 9
Exciting chapter. I like this foray of Ranma into the world of Pokegirls.
The Wandering Soul of 1014
2009-05-27 . chapter 9
-Interesting story. In all honesty, I wouldn't mind seeing (mind you, this could be a possible spin-off later) Ranma going back in time and meddling with Happosai's plans. With all the techniques he/she may pick up, he'll/she'll be quite dangerous . . .

Mind you, an illegally modified pokeball would also be an interesting weapon from the future . . .

Happy writing, and update soon!
Hiryo
2009-05-27 . chapter 9
Thanks for updating again this fine peace of art and it's very nice to see you again updating! Please update soon!
Lagrange
2009-05-26 . chapter 9
Looks decent, thought I think you're stretching believability with some of the fights to make them fit the plot.

One thing that bugged me- you seem to be using Xellos as the mold for Macavity, and while I support that whole heartedly, you can't get away with "now that... is a secret" every time.

If you go back and watch through the series, he often uses different versions of 'now that', like "hm... well, I suppose you could say... that it's a secret!" or "the best explanation for that... is a secret!"

It always bugs me when characters continue to be surprised after 'now that' leads to disappointment.
BukkakeNoJutsu
2009-05-25 . chapter 9
Awesome pervy work. Will Ash and Ranma tagteam Kasumi? How about Eiffel Tower, Chinese Finger Trap, or Spitroast Kasumi?
A Reviewer
2009-05-25 . chapter 9
Another terribly entertaining story. I read chapter one a while back, but wasn't terribly interested. But now, on a day with little to do and eight chapters following the introduction, I figured I'd give it a shot, and was thoroughly amused by this tale.

It's interesting to read a Pokegirl story where Ranma isn't the tamer, yet is safe from being 'tamed'. Definitely a change of pace. I'm also looking forward to seeing how Ranma reacts when he finds out just 'where' he is. Or rather, when.

One thing I'd also like to thank you for doing (yes, thank) is not bloating the story, either the body or the footer, with countless pokedex entries. While some of them are occasionally interesting, none of them really matter too much, and if anything is actually important to the story, it doesn't have to be worked in as such. In this particular tale, the only thing one that matters at all is Ranma's, so having her 'dex entry at the end of the odd chapter here and there is perfectly fine. Speaking of, I would imagine that the Pokedex is scanning Ranma's Junsekyo curse, hence his Pokegirl reading right?

Anyway, yet another great story, keep it up.


Later
Dumbledork
2009-05-25 . chapter 9
Absolutely great new chapter. I'm so happy to see more of this. I have an idea for Ranma. How about letting her evolve too? I'd say into a Phoenix. After all, maybe she absorbed a part of Saffron afterdefeating him and it would be interesting to see a Phoenix!Ranma.
CJNyfalt
2009-05-25 . chapter 9
This is one of the best takes on the Pokegirl world that I have read, especially since people seems to act more like normal.

However, I only discovered this story because I have you on author alerts. The story summary was very lacking and non-informative.

Also, the phasing of the story seems to be a bit off. Mostly because it hurry to introduce more plot elements.
Inverted Helix
2009-05-24 . chapter 9
I just want to say that I like the story. I've been reading it since you started. I don't have much in the way of comments though.
dabnormalone
2009-05-24 . chapter 9
While I enjoy most of this story the increased amount of 'accidents' forcing Ranma into a female form really falls flat, especially considering the in story explaination.

If the magic of Jusenkyo is really 'enjoying' that there's finally an unlocked victum floating around again it would more involve changing said victum back and forth, or at least back more often. Forcing Ranma to essentially stay in the cursed form is not significantly different than having him locked.

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