Heey! I'm a Soren fanatic here and I just saw your fic. Yes, Wendy is kinda sue-ish, but I have a small request...

can you please put some SOren angst in? Lol. I'm odd, I know. But your story so far is great!

Scooter

That was pretty good...Please don't kill Soren...He's my fav character.

*sob* Poor Soren...but since it looks like the "point" of this story is for Wendy to be the new tactitian, he should die. Gah! That came out wrong! Sorry, Soren!

She still seems a bit Sue-ish to me...And, isn't she supposed to be from Daein? The Daeinish? Daeins? Daeintons? Daein citizens don't like laguz, so if Wendy were canon, then she would probably be a racist? speciesist? as well.

My Sue radar is going off. It's horribly spiteful and detrimental to the fandom to kill off Soren just so you can stick in some damn Sue in his place. Stuff like this makes my eyes bleed.

You fail. Please try again. Take out the blonde, blue-eyed bimbo, put in a realistic woman, and try again.

And just to kick your grammar when it's down, start a new paragraph when a new character speaks. And watch your tenses. Keep everything past or at least some form of perfect tense. No present or future outside of dialogue. Work on it. I hope to see Wendy removed or at least de-Sueified next time you update.

Hey, that was good! I find it weird that Wendy appears just when she is needed. I think that if Soren lives (I hope he does) he will have problems with Ike for finding another tactition while he was *out for lunch* and he would have trouble with Wendy for replacing him. Good job!

...no, soren must live! If he dies...then wendy must not live through this...

Found a few mistakes but you corrected them so other than that its awesome!

This is really great! It's nice to see you have something up!