wow, that was long.
as an avid novel reader, i must say that your level of sophistication and cleverness can easily compete with them. i thoroughly enjoyed this, and am looking forward to its sequel.

Really awesome story. I loved reading it and hopefully I'll enjoy the sequel.

SuperN

Hm. It's turning out to be a real problem that I didn't click with hunter nin right away. I've enjoyed the parts with Haku but when you go off to talk about any of the characters... yeah. I get bored. I would really like the story to just be about him. The way it's written, it seems to be more about the hunter-nin. Or even, about ALL the characters. There's no real focus on one person. That's not necessarily a bad thing but it's not what I like, personally.

But, again, I did like the scenes with Haku. And I thought that kid was cute. xD And wow at him bringing up Haku's... preferences. That was so awkward! But I really liked that scene. And I appreciate the fact that it was addressed in that way.

[It’s got a hole burned right through it too. Man!” he exclaimed, clearly impressed. “Whatever jutsu that Kakashi guy used is pretty kick-ass.”]

Yay! I agree. I just love that Kakashi's getting props for that! xD

Hmm. This time I felt like the Hunter-nin's dialogue was better

[At some level, she knew she was still naïve about a great many things, but she also knew that Jimon was capable of dropping more sh-t (verbally-speaking) than a rhinoceros.]

*slaps knee frantically* lmao. I usually don't like cursing and vulgar jokes, but I just love that one!

[With sluggish deliberation he raised his right arm, turned it over and seemed surprised himself that there was a scalpel hidden there.

Haku rolled the knife slowly between his dexterous fingers, transitioning it between and around each, before he handed it over handle-first.]

I loved that scene! It was cool how Maceo caught him with the scalpel and made him give it back! And this scene made me think "Wow, he's definitely a ninja! Finding himself a weapon while groggy and not even doing it consciously!"

[Haku’s eyes widened, then his whole face twisted in agony as he slumped limply where he lay. Mari’s simple gesture had informed him of the end of his world. The wounded boy clutched his hands over his face and, weak as he was, shook with tears.]

I love the phrasing of that. Wow! So heartfelt! I feel so bad for him!

[“What a damn waste. I suppose, from the silly way he’s dressed and the obvious injuries he sustained, that he was one of them ninjers.”]

Lol. You have no idea how much that amuses me! From the fact that he called it a "waste [of that beauty]" to the term "ninjers"! Haha. I love that word now!

[The former doctor’s eyes widened as they tracked a teardrop that gathered in the corner of the boy’s eye…then trickled slowly down his temple.]

This gets creepier and creepier. xD HOW can he be alive? But even though even he thinks he's not, he obviously is... Anyways, this is reminding me of that thing that happens where you're like in a coma, but you're actually aware of everything, stuck in your own head...

Okay, not sure I like the personalities of your hunter nin... at all... especially their irritating accents. But I like the fact that they arrived and that Haku's body not being there could cause trouble for Team Seven and/or the Leaf village, if the misunderstanding continues. That's interesting!

Hi, just wanted to let you know that despite being skeptical at first, this story is really lovely.

First off you have made one glaring mistake through out the whole story...

Haku is not a cross dresser in the serie's, he's simply wearing a kimono when he meet's Naruto in the forest...

This is worn both by male and female so unless you already knew this and intentionaly changed it then that is a mistake...

Secondly, WOW! Amazing story i must say, and even if you had the most shitty plot ever you are incredible at making new carecters with unique personality's and that alone could make me read the story, that you got a very throughly made plot and one of the longest most amazing fight scene's ive ever read in fanfiction only makes it so much better..

Well gonna read the sequel now, so i hope it's just as good...

Reading the training ring's girl fight with the old geezer was boring but Haku fighting the anbu is actually quite exiting to read... Very imaganitive and nicely (Is that even a word?) writen...

Ive read to fourth chapter now and this is the second story in almost two years of reading fanfic that got my attention without having Naruto as the main carecter so it's a pretty good job so far...

lol, now that is the Haku I grew to know and love and threw a fit when he died.
Are you going to write a sequel, I hope so as I would love to read about Naruto getting the letter and heading to Wave to knock some sense into his friend for waiting so bloodly long to let him know that he is still alive.
It would be great and very interesting to read about the continuation of their friendship.
Great ending, although the story itself had me uncertain and unsure about parts of it.

not bad so far although I don't really get the reason why he thinks so badly of Naruto, they are budding friends and understand what kind of life they both have had to lead in order to survive. Like Haku said, if things had been diferent then they would have been fast friends and each other would have gained another precious person. Then again, maybe Haku is just confused and mixed up...hard to say for sure.

Now that was quite the epic story. I originally planned to read a few chapters a day, but in the end I couldn't help but read the rest of it right away. Suffice to say, I became thoroughly engrossed in the story. Not only did you do an excellent job writing Haku as well as the other characters from the series, keeping them in character as well as expanding on them at the same time, but your original characters were a treat to read about as well, especially the ANBU.

The conversations you wrote between the characters certainly held my interest by far; the ones Haku had with Councilor Hirai and Inari in Chapters 11 and 14 respectively standing out the most. And then your action scenes were impeccable. The multi-chapter duel between Haku and Juri had me on the edge of my seat. Well detailed and full of enough surprises that I wasn't sure what to expect as I continued to read on.

As far as the story goes... it's almost too hard for me to pick out one singular moment of it that I enjoyed the most. Haku giving Zabuza proper send off after what happened to his remains earlier was handled so very well to be quite honest. And then the little moments in the story like Haku's practicing with Zabuza's weapon, his attempts at writing to Naruto at long last... Those were the type of things I was hoping to see in the story at some point, and when they actually happened I couldn't help but smile. Then there was the part towards the end where my favorite leaf-ninja, Anko Mitarashi, made an unexpected cameo appearance. What a pleasant surprise that was.

So all and all... great job you did with this story. It was well worth the read, that it was.

I LOVE YOU!
i liked him too. this is, so far, the perfict story for him. i REALY did not like that he died. ive been watching some realy cool yet depressing videos on youtube, so this is absolutly awsome
so, thanks for the story i supose. i wonder if zabuza will be in it? probibly not i guess.
youve got alote of chapters on this one, and i think i saw a sequile(hopfully)but anyway, if you deside to put wp more stories, ill definatly cheek them out.
agein, Thanks.

Yep, I liked it.

This is good!
Haku is my fave character and you portray him well.