I was about to sigh sadly and hope that maybe there was a sequel and then sigh again because there wasn't, but I am so glad to have read the author's note at the end, but I guarentee you, you will be hearing more from me!! I loved this one, and I would love to read more on this stporyline and relationship. This is awesome!

Erin

This was very cute. I loved the last part, how it got a little suspenseful when she asked what any of them could say to make it better, and then they all saying they love and care for her, and I think I squee'd a little at the 'with all my heart part'.

Erin

Wow, I really liked this chapter because it all came down to what I have been hoping for for a while now. I am too excited for the ending that I can't leave a long assed review for this chapter.

Erin

I am curious to know what Violet wants in return, but it made me laugh that Dicker wanted her to lead the family again to keep Dash and Bpov from destroying things. Anyway, three more chapters. Pooh.

Erin

This chapter made me laugh, aminly because of the last fewl lines of it, but I loved that Violet has feelings for Mirage now, and she is trying to figure out what this means. Gah, only four more chapters, I wonder what will happen, but whether or not it is fully true, the fact that Mirage saw an equal of power with Violet was pretty cool to read.

Erin

Wow, that was an awesome chapter. They all are, but to hear that even a trusted friend of the family is scared of her, well that is pretty harsh to get through. I love this:


”I just want you to know one thing, Rick.” A tiny quaver crept into her words. “I’m not doing this for you. I’m not doing it to keep my company or my money. And I’m sure as hell not doing it for Helen Parr. I’m doing this for her.” Mirage slammed the phone down, cutting off the call.


Very cute, and I liked to read that. Anyway, I am off to the next chapter.


Erin

Ooh, I hope things aren't gonna go downhill. I like the little bits of the story that you put in Mirage's point of view. I never disliked her but I never knw what to think of her either. I think that's the point though. Great chapter. I love a talking Jack.

Erin

Awesome chapter. I could see Violet getting angry about Keri just after they got a chace to kiss and get through things this time. I was rooting for that, but I am back to rooting for Mirage now, lol.

Erin

"Violet Parr would be manipulated and brought into Mirage’s game as a pawn to be used and discarded at her whim, she firmly asserted to herself. But in the back of her mind, closed off and shut down by her conscious, she didn’t want a pawn, she wanted a queen."

I really loved that this is the side of The Incredibles that can't be shown because of the chil'ren. I love that Violet is starting to come into her own person in this, as she was my favorite character, and I like that Mirage is sort of helping her through it when no one else can. The part I quoted above was awesome. It was so cute and I can't help but want for the two of them to be together, but again (and I might feel this a few different times) I hope it isn't going to leave Kari behind. Anyway, I can't wait for more.

Erin

Oh no, the silver strand again! I love it. I at first didn't get what was going on about the details, but then you transitioned to the way you did it, and I was like 'oh I get it now!' Great story, and I can't wait for the next part, which is... NOW!! Heehee!

Erin

I liked this because this chapter and the last one showed how much Violet has grown, but she is still young. I like that she has more contol on her powers now, and I like that you showed it so much in these past chapters with the way she squeezed Dash, and now with the marker writing Incurable on the page. Great job! And I can't wait to see what happens when the Agency finds out just WHO Violet relates to. I also loved their talk in the cafe', and the fact that Violet sort of recognizes her.


Erin

I liked this. I can't wait to see what happens next. I feel bad for Kari, though I am rooting for the Chi/Violet pairing.



Erin

Okay, well, I had a good sized review for this chapter but it just disappeared for no reason on me, so I am a little mad at my computer for that. I loved the last line from ChiMera in this, the dream sequence, and for some reason, I am wondering if the neighbors or Kari's parents ever questioned the 'uncle' as a pedophile... but that is my own paranoya.

Erin

I like the start to this. I saw a couple of other Mirage/Violet stories, but I didn't actually read them. This one looked really good, and so far, you haven't changed my mind on that fact. It had some good moments, and I could see and hear it all in my head, and I liked that you have Violet here questioning her sexuality and being confused with it first before anything else could happen in any realtionship.

Erin

Right now I'm not sure if Skippy adds to this story or detracts from it, but I'm leaning towards detract...