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| SasunaruTLA 2008-07-14 ch 8,  | abuseyay!! it's so good!! i hate the cliffhangers though! |
| SHOTA-chan 2008-06-22 ch 1, | abuseHello English language; my name is Grammar~! Yes, in any case, I found this difficult to read because of the numerous grammatical errors. Now, I'm not talking about your using "that" instead of "who"; rather, I'm speaking of the missing semi-colons and long sentences without punctuation. I'm not saying that it's a bad fanfiction—far from it!—but I AM saying that it would be a whole hell of a lot easier to read if I weren't tripping over words and sentences. ...On a brighter note, I think the plot is absolutely amazing. In terms of the characters, I don't like the way in which they were painted. Not saying that it's bad, because it's not bad; it's just not my cup of tea. ~Bradly~ P.S. – The phrase "as of late" is a stylistic nightmare. P.P.S. – In dialogue, when the person speaking changes, a new paragraph must be started; you often put the words of two separate speakers in the same paragraph. P.P.P.S. – There are several spelling mistakes. |
| deletedeletepleaz 2008-04-01 ch 14, | abuseFAVORITE! OMGOSH! |
| BlueEyedAlchemist 2008-02-01 ch 1, | abusei luv the covenant nice job |
| Dark Angel's Blue Fire 2007-11-18 ch 14, | abuseTyler is ace i love him this was amazing! |
| sporty-mia09 2007-08-24 ch 14, | abuseWhat can I say but Wow awesome. When Tyler started laughing he reminded me of Dustin. Really great fice cant wait for more. |
| ccmalfoy 2007-08-03 ch 1, | abuseI like it so far but his name is Caleb not Cable. Alright I have to read the rest! Good beginning! |
| exitlight 2007-07-23 ch 14, | abuseThis is a great story! |
| Sweets03 2007-07-02 ch 14, | abusewell it was a bit rushed but okay and tyler sweared alot in the movie remember? but it was still good |
| Siavahda 2007-06-18 ch 6, | abuseOk, for a start - I think this story ROCKS! And I havn't even got that far yet! *lol* One thing, though - I know spelling isn't a big deal but you spell it 'does', not 'dose'. Sorry, I'm just a neat freak! On the good hand - I love the plotline you've got going, and Pogue and Caleb are so sweet! Fluffyness! *grins* But yeah. Keep it up! |
| HauntedPast 2007-06-16 ch 14, | abusethat was very nice! |
| DaRk-HoPeLsS-rOmAnTiC 2007-06-13 ch 14, | abusethis is a really good ending to this story!! even though the fight scene was really short it still worked |
| Mickey Stone 2007-06-10 ch 14, | abuseOk, I liked this. It has the potential to be a really good fic. However...Spell Check, Spell Check, Spell Check! I can not stress this enough! This fic is riddled with spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes, and it ruins the effect of the story. A good idea is to read through each chapter thoroughly before posting. Most of these mistake are easily caught and corrected with just a proof read. It doesn't take long. But yeah. Over all, I liked it. The plot idea was good. |
| BlackCaleb 2007-06-09 ch 14, | abuseThat was an amazing chapter... a great way to finish your fic! |
| Gabwr 2007-06-08 ch 14, | abuseThat was a great ending. I love how you had Tyler be the one to finish Chase off. Rosie should have a nice little talk with Reid about his mouth. That would be one funny talk. |