You have plenty of praise where praise is due, so I'll leave it at that. It's a cheery yet enigmatic story with a lot of cute moments and a few truly bizarre ones.

I'm a bit more curious as to whether you intend to make clear the significance of the title in the next few chapters; at the current pace, I wouldn't expect it to come up before Christmas, but I'm often wrong about such things.

I'm no scholar of Sindarin, but I suspect that the title would read more correctly as "Narn Peredhelen". Just a thought.

Good chapter. It was very short, but good. I am expecting a long one next!

Reviews for the third and fourth chapters :

I admit I'm not in a good mood when I started to read the third chapter. But after read some lines, my mood suddenly back. You are a good mood-builder :) You also great at explaining situation :)

I enjoy reading your story and I'm really curious about what will happen next ^^ What secret Sara's mother is hiding? Where does she go? Will wait for it eagerly on the next chapter ^^

Regards, Yuki

You finally updated. I like where it's going and I hope something exciting happens soon!

Nice chapter. I am getting the feel of the story. Awesome job.

OMG! that was so good. ur so descriptive. this new character seems pretty shady or sketchy actually. Where do u get these ideas? wizard of words. u got me hooked. keep writing! I think merry or pippin should rap. and also they should convince Gandalf to get a haircut. Who knows what lives in his beard?

You finally updated. I really like this chapter. The description once again is outstanding! Keep it up!

I didn't know you started another fanfic. I actually like this one. I love your style of writing. It always brings me into the story. Please update soon.

I'm basically stunned again at the good work done by this author. Unlike most things i read..this doesnt lose my interest one bit. The way everything is defined and explained makes it very visual, but it leaves some small spaces to ad a bit of your own imagination. It gave me an idea of what time and area during the original LOTR it was in then it brought in the new character and story which im sure will eventually be very interesting. TWO THUMBS UP!!

Hello, Sepiroth-sama ^^ This is Yuki.
I'll re-post my comment for the 1st chapter too.
1st chapter :
It's really great - like the last one. I myself not reading the book, but I watched the movie, and i may say that I really like the stories. The introduction you made is really nice. I can picture the real situation while reading it.
The story goes smoothly from one paragraph to the other. From one conversation to another. I'm looking forward to see the next chapter.
2nd Chapter :
Really nice, Sephiroth-sama :)
You're really talented in building up the emotions for the story. I get into the story slowly without realizing it.
When I realize it, I already stuck deep in the story. I really want to know what will happen next with Sara's mother. Will something bad happen? Do you want to make a war scene or something like that in later chapter?? Hehe, I'm asking too much.

Regards, Yuki

This was a great chapter. I really like the detail in the writing. Very nice.

I was very shocked when I read this chapter. The way it's written, very wlel thought of. I can't wait to read on. Please update soon.

I read this before. Before you posted it. I liked it then. I still do.

I especially love the bits of hobbit characteristics and such here and there.

This is very well written, apart from a couple typoes like 'starring' instead of 'staring'. However, I have one nitpick: I was merrily reading the story, until I got totally thrown out of it when I found out this hobbit girl is supposed to come from Nargothrond. To me - and to any one of your readers who are familiar with The Silmarillion - Nargothrond is one of the elven strongholds which existed in Beleriand during the First Age and which have been under the sea for thousands of years by the time your story is taking place. Reading about a hobbit who supposedly lives there is giving me a fairly bizarre (and kind of awesome) mental image of a society of merhobbits, and I don't really think that was what you intended to convey to your readers. Maybe the girl could come instead from one of those villages near Bree, like Staddle?


Apart from that little detail, you've done a great job with this story. Carry on writing!

It's extremely well-written. I was put off in the beginning because it seemed to be heading towards a rewrite/recap of movie events, but I kept going and then your new character showed up. I look forward to reading more.

You may want to consider revising your summary. It just screams Mary Sue, and I'm hoping she won't turn out that way. A summary that mirrors almost every little-girl-lost story on the site will not do your writing style justice.