 JabberDragon 2007-01-15 . chapter 1The title sounds very good and angsty. Good titles don't come by that easy these days, so extra marks there, hee hee! ^^
It's pretty good for a first angst because I can see there IS thought behind it, and it can provoke thought and all that!
The first line was a bit, "Eh?". I'm not very deep or at least I may be thick headed but I'm not so sure Sasuke had to kill Naruto BECAUSE he loved Naruto. Also, some people don't know very much about the Sharingan and that to get Mangekyou, you need to kill your best friend. Maybe include that in a note?
I'm a bit confused, also. Because you say that 'Sasuke chose power over love'. He kind of actually chose love over power (in this context) by going over to Orochimaru and NOT killing Naruto.
This short drabble is a wee bit too confusing to figure out the sense of it all. 0_o Maybe next time express your ideas clearer so your readers can understand? We know the meaning (No. It wasn't worth it) but actually in a roundabout kind of way, so many anti-Sasuke people rant on against him because they think it's not worth it and he's betraying people like Naruto and Sakura.
For first angst, it'd a good effort, though! ^^ |