And of course the reviews get redundant.

Basically I think you should learn to use the quotation marks a lot more often, and separate your paragraphs, especially when someone's speaking. Otherwise, it's very difficult to read.

But it's got a great theme and idea to it. It just needs a bit of grammar help. ^^

I'll go ahead and mostly agree with the previous review (and apologize for taking so long to get around to reading this). You have good ideas, and you obviously put thought into the story. Just a few typo's and some grammar issues to work on. All fixable problems. All in all, it was still a pretty good first go (coming from someone who's merely working on their second installment anyhow) and I hope you keep writing!

Well, I love the tenderness in your story, and I liked Wanda's remark about Cosmo not working out at all, calling him "Mr. Bones with Sleeves" (that line coming from the FOP movie "Abracastastrophe", my favorite). And I do think you have talent; however, if you don't mind my saying so, you need to check your spelling, punctuation and syntax before posting your stories. Your story has a lot of run-on sentences, and there are several obvious errors, such as in the sentence "Cosmo dragged Cosmo away from all the attractive Japanese girls" (surely you meant "Wanda dragged Cosmo away"?) But all in all, I think you've made a great start. Please continue writing. I think your first effort shows a lot of promise. :)