And so we have our end.

Finally... well done. I'm probably gonna have to read twice to make sure I caught everything, but now we're dealing with the future and those nasty time plots! Oh boy. You may have gone about this a bit fast.

Of the rogue mages, Risc sticks in my mind the most. The others... eh not so much. But it could be just screentime.

I await your next piece and look forward to working with you in other endeavors!

I must say, very nice action sequence. Now if only I remembered what this story was about... time to reread!

And there we go... a wondrous story REVIVED!

The fights well done, the tension and description top class. I wonder what the three mages are trying to accomplish, and what awaits us at the finale.

We'll see! Oh we'll definitely see~!

interesting very interesting CANT WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER XD
this is quite good hope you update fast

I for one am glad you’ve taken up the story again, though your author’s note left me more than a little confused. The self-denigration, even though done in a joking matter, is undeserved. While Termination may not be all you envisioned it to be (and be truthful, what author is completely happy with what he’s written?), I’ve found it an excellent story well worth the read. And in reading I’ve learned some things that have improved my writing, and I have no higher praise than that.

The chapter itself was short and more in the nature of setting of the next chapters, so the action minimal but still enjoyable. There were a few clunky sentences during the first section. Ignoring the ‘pointed’ comments earlier, sentences like “Still, one didn’t choose one’s relations, and just like a brother and sister, though she denied this bond, she loved him despite the perks that could sometimes outweighe this simple love.” seemed to go on a bit long.

But on the flip side, you also wrote “Despite Eva’s sulky silence beside him, the night felt perfect. Moonlight danced softly among the trees, the moon itself a radiant circle in the sky. A cool wind blew, and with it came the fresh scent of the woods. He wished he could share the feeling of peace with his master, but he didn’t think she would take well to it. However, the tension she cast about like a poisonous touch was almost too much to bear.” A perfect bit of description there.

I eagerly await chapter 11.

Will kotaro play a big part in the story?

Kotaro took one glance back at the scene – Asuna and Konoka yelling non-stop, Chisame and Setsuna doing their best to hold them back – and shrugged. “I’ll never understand women.”

“This has nothing to do with women.”

The two boys looked over to where Eva sat on a nearby ledge, swinging her legs.

Wolf boy rolled his eyes. “Hey, you’re female and I don’t understand what you mean. Isn’t that proof enough?”

“It depends on what you’re proving,” she replied sardonically.

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I liked this passage. Good one.

A.A. :)

And Risc gets a little more screen time. In case you're wondering how I read the chapter so fast and reviewed it, I did so on my PSP and am using the PC to write the review. It was awesome.

Anyway, I would like to say that there should only be so much foreshadowing before we actually get into the details of Risc's story/the dream situation. It's been a pretty long time, we should be getting mighty close to the climax of the story and resolution of stuff/plotline. In common man speak: Hurry it up and do cool stuff!

So Haruna's father gots issues? Undisclosed as of yet issues? I'll say now that I thought the two -Yue and Haruna- were both out of character for their little argument. Yue too easily provoked and quarrelsome, and Haruna a little too...thoughtful, I suppose. I also found it weird how spending time with Negi was the goal, yet they got separated so incredibly fast...Kotaro was good, though. YAY Kotaro! You did well with him.

I'm glad the issue of Konoka and Asuna is starting to become an issue between everyone. Though, you'd think they would of noticed them fighting sooner.

Okay, so you've explained the reason of Konoka and possibly Haruna's change of attitude, but make it so that the question now is why they experienced it...

There are a lot of questions and mystery popping up here and there, and they did their job well. Do take caution that there might be just too much to handle, but I have faith in you.

So march on! To Victory!!

G.Bread

Nice work, as usual!

Poor Haruna and Konoka, it appears they're getting the short end of the stick this time around. And lol at the world's most subtle reference (I'm not even telling anyone else what it is! :P)

There are many puzzles you're laying out though, be warned of what could happen if you lose track...

I think I beta read this so I'll let me comments made there stand. I will pause to say however, that I enjoyed this chapter.

A.A. :)

Oho! Quite a nice chapter, some elements of humour mixed with angst is always and interesting pair, and you've hit it off quite well.

Now that tension's building between Haruna and Yue, and Konoka and Asuna are still ignoring each other, the story is getting more mysterious and alluring, I wondered if Haruna's statement is more suited for themselves than for Negi right now...

This is getting quite good, so keep it up, I'll be looking forward to this.

G.Bread

It`s a vast imprvment from that long conversation you called a last chapter. I see you may have returned to your best after all. Please don`t do another one where the conversation took over. I wasn`t sure where they even were until I read the previous chapter. Your new plot ideas, the problems building from the vision. All of this is exceelant as your setting up even the impossible to make sad Haruna a tragic past. Good work as I wouldn`t be brave enough to attempt that