First of all I just want to say I think this is a really good story, with all the AU-ness and OOC-ness included. The thought of Grissom with Sofia kinda grosses me out, but it was an awesome twist to the story; definitely justified Sara's anger. I had been thinking 'What is she so ** about? Obviously Gil wasn't a virgin before they hooked up.' But when you revealed that it was Sofia he was with, I could definitely understand Sara's reaction. And the picture you gave of Grissom sitting on his floor crying was breaking my heart (I'm a softy for hot men who shed tears).

So anyways...I don't know if you want to finish this at all, but if you do, I have an idea that might work. The idea of Grissom forgetting about the box probably wouldn't fly considering they work with Sofia (constant reminder). Maybe instead Gris could tell Sara that he left the box in the closet so that she would find it. He wanted her to know the truth but considering the fact that he sucks in communication (most men do) he couldn't find a way to bring it up. He honestly didn't know it would hurt her so much to find it and think he was trying to hide his past or else he would have just flat out told her.

And you could always wrap it up with Gris and Sara getting busted by everyone in a hot make-up make-out session in the breakroom. That would be a good way to lighten it in the end ;)

Anyways, just my thoughts. Again, good job on the story and I hope you finish it!

i need more! please update son! ILU Greg

what a great story are you ever planning on finishing it
( Please do )

Awesome chapter, LOVED reading it!! Great job, can't wait for the next one to show up!!:p HURRYY UPP!

The chapter made sense to me. I liked it...even though it was short :(

Anywho...even though I liked the part last time with Sara and Brass, you so freakd me out this time, cuz I read it wrong at first and totally thought they actually ended up doing it -gag-

We were about to have words right there Bonnie...no way in holy hell could I possibly allow Sofia AND Brass...ugh.

How to proceed...uh, well Sara, Brass and Grissom could all get together to plot and carry out the horrible, untimely demise of one Sofia Curtis, but I guess that would be just a tad OOC...

W/E

Jess :)

Sofia huh? Better than Heather! I like Heather alot, they have a real chemistry. But that's not where the writers took it.
Heathers *lifestyle* would send CSI to latenight Cinemax.

How are you going to clean up his mess and make her sane again?
The poor girl thought she was special, now she finds out she's second special!
He better do something quick, without reservations.

Bon, did you have this beta'ed? Tell me you didn't. I hate to flame a beta, but they are not doing you justice.
example--brake, like car brakes.
break, like break-up, break a bone or take a break.

I really admire your drive. I mean that. You have come a long way since that first disjointed, confused story. I could see your potential though. And there is nothing wrong with your style. Waiting for more updates, LC.

Wow, Sofia...that's an interesting turn of events, useless spork. Anyways, the Brass/Sara dynamic is awesome, and I'm glad Brass did what he did. Great job, and I cant wait for the next chapter.

OMG.. YOU SO DIDN'T BUT YOU DID!! OMG.. SPORK! WEEH why did you do it!? Why did you put Sofia in the picture *weeps* Anyways, xP Nice story! I'm looking forward to the next chapters!! xD More, more.. gimme more!!xP.. Awesome job! ^^

Bonnie! What the ** was THAT all about?! Sofia!? Come on...ew!

Catherine I could have handled...mostly because I would have been right =]...but HER?! She was another guess of mine, but I sure as hell wasn't going to say it! EW!

I do love the bit at the end with Brass and Sara though. I don't know why I do, I just do.

Even though I'm still EW!, I'm still in love with this story.

u continue please.. i don't know why i'm thinking its terri

Ohh yeah, I finally got it. I thought '98 would be a long time ago for them! I had to scroll back before it hit me. The shoebox was from the *other woman*.
I'd be ** too.
MEN! can't live with em can't shoot em. HA
Do we know her? Will she be making a return?

Introduce her to Keppler! HAHA:))

How's Rhode Island?

About time we find out about that damn box! No wonder Sara flipped her lid...

'Thanks'...so Grissom

I loved it even though it was short and, as always, I am waiting for more!

Short but damn powerful! ;).. Loved reading it, finally giving me an idea what she found!xD.. Anyways, I hope chapter 5 is going to be very soon! ^^

Yay, you posted it! ^^ I loved reading it and I hope we get to hear more about Grissom's thingie and about Sara ! ^^ Have fun in R.I. and I hope it'll be posted ( chapter 4 ) as soon as possible, great job!!

Hey Bon, bad flight? Welcome to America! At least you don't have to fly everyday. Traffic can be a headache everyday.

I think I need to re-read ch. 1 & 2 again. I can't remember how they link to each other.
I did like the interaction between Gil & Jim. Gil needs a push.
I wish TPTB could see that.
Did Gil & Sara meet in Frisco 10 yrs ago in your world? Is she mad because he was in a relationship and didnt tell her?

BTW, your beta missed a few spots. That's concrit Bon, not flames.
LC