Great stuff, I enjoyed this, I like you ability to hint at larger complexities in the world though Kellings' narration. Having to put down the dog was a great detail. Obviously the barking was problematic, if only i could do that to my mum's chihuahua... just kidding!

You also did a good job of putting the emotions and reactions through. I could relate to her. I think that's a sign of a true storyteller.

My main caveats were about the execution of the people who were bitten which was central to the story. Firstly, you don't explain the process of bitten/infected people turning into the Zach and how Kellings knows that turning into a zombies is a forgone conclusion before executing Ashley and Tess, although I can imagine that this information could have been on the radio broadcast that you did mention.

Secondly, and more importantly (to me), I think maybe you needed to justify why Kellings decided execution was preferable to quarantine or death watch. My favorite zombie movie is the 2004 Dawn of the Dead and I really liked an infected father's last words "you want every second..." or something like that, before dying ,turning then being incapacitated by Ving Rhames. This seemed more humane. If you had given Kellings a debatable reason to chose instant execution it could have given the story a final paradox for the reader to think on...

Thanks for the story!

Ben

This was excellent!

Nice, to see a WWZ story. But there was some parts that was confusing, Like who's Ashley? Tanya's sister?

Very nice. I'm so glad to have found a WWZ fanfic. And a well-written one at that! =D I hope you continue. I would love to see more.

I was very surprised to hear that WWZ fanfiction existed. But, I was pleased to see that you did a good job.

In an interview format like this, it makes sense that the narrator wouldn't over-explain things, or do it in perfect order, so I can't complain about the slightly disjointed style. There were two tiny parts that confused me. The first is when Tanya's going to her uncle's house - she says "since I was afraid that G was gonna pop up..." Who's G? I assumed she meant a zombie, but it doesn't really follow, since she usually uses "Zack" to refer to the zombies.

The second part is when they get to Coral Castle - Tanya then calls it Giles' castle, which doesn't make any sense. I read it as "the castle that Giles suggested," but Rick was the one who mentioned it. By the way, excellent use of a truly odd Florida landmark. Nice detail (and accurate) with the inoperable gate.

The only other thing is that the passage of time speeds up, and the detail drops off, once they get to the base. I think it works, but if you wanted to add more interest, you could perhaps put more detail or some dialogue there. Maybe describe the first refugee to arrive, and then generalize about the rest? Not that it's currently bad - it still works. I can see Tanya glossing over the end, maybe she's tired of talking about it? Her actions at the base are relevant, however, given that she was charged for them.

Hopefully this was helpful, and again, you really did a great job.

Just for the record, i love the very last bit about why she's in prison, for killing "injured" refugees. It sounds just like something that would have happened in Brooks' world. Great job!

Excellent!

Your writing style isn't exactly the same as Max Brooks's, but really, whose is?

It's great to see a fan base (albeit a small one) for his zombie fiction. Though I haven't been able to read WWZ yet, I'm hoping to get the book soon.

Would you like to collaborate on a Zombie Survival Guide fanfiction sometime in the near future? I'd do it alone, but I have several other fics going on at the moment.

Anyway, great story. Keep up the good work.

Cheers,
Ghilanna

Oh my goddess seriously I shouldn't of been reading that alone I got so scared lol. Write more please! I'm on the verge of get Max Brooks other book compainion to the zombie survial book lol. I loved this story!