Der Letzte Tanz - the last dance?

hm... good point,

brittney

Congratulations on writing not only a truly excellent AF story but a believable, non-awkward crossover. This crossover is even better than most because it can actually be understood by people who know nothing about the other story/universe/world; Death truly feels like he belongs in AF.

I also have to commend you on creating a reasonable projection of what could have occurred after Opal Deception. I have read far too many fanfics where the projections lack sufficient support from either canon and/or common sense (e.g. Holly suddenly kicking out Sool and becoming commander). However, the first paragraphs, up until halfway through the fight in the warehouse, are a little too awkward. It’s very difficult to introduce the background to the action smoothly; your use of dialogue to do so helped considerably. I can't exactly offer specific suggestions for improvement and, since this is clearly a polished and celebrated piece, it might be better to just leave the beginning as it stands.

I very much enjoyed the interaction between Death and Artemis and absolutely agree with your interpretation of Artemis' mind and fears. I had thought much the same, but could not express his feelings and thoughts so coherently. The twist at the end, when Artemis says that he cannot go with Death, was exactly the type of twist that Eoin Colfer would pull (and is thus perfectly in-character for Artemis).

On that note, everyone in this fic seems to be spot on. The development of your characters is even better than it is in Hostage Situations (which I promise I will eventually review, because I don't think that I have done so yet).

I just have one question about the background of your fic: how do Butler and Artemis get below ground? Obviously, Sool and his lackeys don't notice. However, even with Foaly's help, getting two conspicuous humans belowground seems like a difficult trick to pull. Of course, the warehouse could be aboveground (it's hard to tell); in that case, the background holds together because I imagine that it is easier to get Holly and Mulch above than it is to get Artemis and Butler below ground.

I guess that this is about it. A final and hearty congratulations on your well-deserved Orion Awards. This fic is a model of both a wonderfully executed AF fic and a beautifully thought-out crossover. Good luck with your future writings.

-Avyncentia

I read this story on criminality and thought it was great. I couldn'e review then, so I am now.

I love the crossover. So original and non-corny.

More importantly, so Artemis.

I hope you write more soon.