An excellent read I do hope you plan on finishing ths story up on the future.



Hemotem

Any word on wether you are going to continue this or is it abandoned?

Cool, but not really my taste. Seeing Harry so powerfless just makes me depressed... Come on! I understand that it's part of the story, but you'll have to throw him a bone (or boon, whichever) or it might as well be an angst oneshot about how Harry is magically enslaved and the world goes SNAFUBAR.
Otherwise, you've got some talent, building up suspense like this, and the story itself is rather wellwritten. Keep it up.

This is a completely AWSOME story! I haven't really read a lot of femslash but I really like this fic.
Please update this story! Please, please, please, please, PLEASE!

Interesting story and I really enjoyed reading it. But you stopped before the best part (in my eyes ;) Telling Jack^^). I like the way Harry is still himself, even if is a girl. I've read several stories (or tried to read) where Harry is changed into a girl and without explanation he behaves more like a girl than every girl I know (Make up, skirts, the whole drama). I hope you continue the story :)

The story idea is nice I would like to read more please write more chapters

Great crossover. You have maintained the essence of both fandoms and have done an excellent job in capturing the personalities of the characters. I truly wish you would work on this again because I can hardly wait to see what comes next... especially in six months time when a MALE Harry Potter gets his inheritance at Gringotts.

Jack makes a great Uncle and the explanation is credible.

Please please please search and find your muse for this story. Post more soon.

Awesome story. I can't wait to see What Harry has planned. I would love to see harry kick moldy voldie in the groin area.(shudders)

I was wondering when you're going to update?

Thankyou for writing such an interesting story!

as it looks now, this story aint getting updated anymore, since it have been about a year, or at least months since last update, if you want, i would like to write a simular story, or an au of this story, set in season 1-3, or maybe a stargate atlantis version of this story, so, what i mean is that i would love to adopt the story, but instead write an au set in season 1, and later season 2 and 3, i haven't watched as far as to season 7 yet, so thats why, im about to start with season 4, and im almost done with stargate atlantis, season 4, but i would love to work on an au of this story, set in about that time, if im not allowed to, i guess im allowed to make a new story, but with same pairings, and like simular background story, i would love to see this story updated, though, still, its the best

Great story. Hope to see an update sometime soon.

Might want to remove that last paragraph at the bottom of this chapter, which looks like a note from your beta rather than part of the story. Otherwise, this is rather interesting. Rough around the edges, but interesting nonetheless.

Ok, chapter 1 needs a lot of work. Snape seems like a cheesy movie villain talking about his plans and such.

Tonks and Remus really should not have been able to put together a perfect picture of what happened between Harry and Snape when there was virtually no evidence. At best they may suspect something after finding Harry's broken wand, but with Snape in a coma they could never be sure. Talking to Kreacher could likely have any number of possible results.

Harry really shouldn't have been found so easily. The map shouldn't even be able to function due to the blood wards nondetection feature you say exist (which I could believe is part of it in canon) let alone have been created. Harry could very well have ended up living on Diagon Alley for a few weeks adjusting to being female and beginning to learn about his new metamorph ability before Remus, searching for Harry on Diagon, catches her scent and, perhaps suspecting that she's a girl that slept with Harry, demands to know where Harry is.

Obliviating Jack seems rather rediculous. He has an american accent and he's been working on an extremely tight secret project with the stargate. It would sound more realistic if he was a half-brother who was never told of his british relatives or something. Almost anything would be better than supposedly rewriting his entire childhood to make him think he was an only child. Anyone who knew him would immediately recognize the personality shift such a feat would cause.

Last thing: for at least chapter 2 you should reread the chapter. I noticed dozens of places you either skipped a letter in a word, or in some places skipped an entire word in the sentence. Here's one example for you: "“I’m going with.” Luna interjected with an air of finality."

I think the story has some potential, but you need to fix a bunch of stuff.

Just found the story. Good stuff, hope to see more.