All Right! I agree with you that it seemed un Obi-wan Like to just leave Anakin on mustafar after thier duel. Can't wait for Compassion to be put back up! Good work!

*jumps up and down, pointing*

Ah! Ah! 'Breath of Patience' reference! 'Breath of Patience' reference!

Wow. You know, I just remembered I have never reviewed this story. Shame on me. I'm so sorry.

First off, I love the way you write Usaki. I don't want to like her, but you make me like her. Darn you. As usual, your ability to write combat scenes simply blows me away. I can only read and be envious.

It's probably odd, but my favorite part of this chapter was the scene between Usaki and Padme. I couldn't tell you why...it just really struck me for some reason. I was able to see the whole confrontation in my head, which I always enjoy.

As for my favorite part of the whole story...it's a tie. When Padme opens herself up to Obi-Wan and finds herself wielding a lightsaber? That entire section is incredible, and not just because of the action elements. I like the description of the Force she feels flowing through her from Obi-Wan. It's an interesting concept to me, and coincidental since there's something like that coming up in my next chap of 'SCMG'.

The other part is Obi-Wan confronting Anakin after Usaki escapes in Chapter 4. Anakin turning from the comfort that he could have if he would only admit to needing help...well, basically.

Wow, this is really long. I'm sorry. But I'm really looking forward to the next story in this 'saga'.

Again and again. Do not taunt Happy Fun Ball...

Your widely varied writing styles never cease to amaze. I am impressed, as usual. Far be it from me to be disappointed, lest it be from the shortness (HA!) of the chappie or having to wait. Like the good Obi I am, I can wait.

Really well done. Your pacing is up to your usual excellent standards. I really did like some of the final interaction between Anakin and Usaki, where you can see that she is a Master of the Dark Side and he is still teetering on the edge of his Dark Apprenticeship.

There are a couple of spelling errors, but I saw in your preface that you're going to do another edit, so I'm sure you'll catch those.

If I was going to offer anything by the way of "constructive" it would be the reference to Qui-Gon. When Obi-Wan started to rebuke Anakin, I expected Anakin to throw Qui-Gon's own disobedience in Obi-Wan's face. I wasn't expecting him to be contrite (but then again, I usually expect the worst from Anakin).

But speaking of Qui-Gon (and you know he's my favorite), I did like Obi-Wan's own disappointment that he felt he'd failed his own Master. That was nicely done.

I know you said this was the end of this story, but I hope you'll continue it again at some point. The interaction of all the characters is excellent.

I know, I know. It took me long enough to get to Chapter 4. Sorry for the delay. I actually re-read Ch. 2 & 3 to make sure I remembered what was going on (still just as fun to see Vandalyn's name in there!)

Anyway, loved Chapter 4. The style and pacing is still up to your usual high standard, and I like the way you do your fight scenes. They're detailed and engaging.

I especially liked your part when Obi-Wan and Padme open up to each other. Your descriptions of the small part in her that she won't share are accurate and serve as a good foreshadow that her lack of full disclosure might lead to problems in the future (you don't say it overtly, but that's the impression I got).

I think the only think I would suggest to improve that is just a little more about his memories/feelings for Qui-Gon. Qui-Gon Jinn was Obi-Wan's Master and mentor for so many years, I would have thought there might be a few more memories about him that Padme would see, not just his death. I realize that your intent was not to analyze ALL of Obi-Wan's memories, but I would have liked to have seen a bit more about Qui-Gon.

I will be curious to see what you do with Obi-Wan now that he is the only one who knows about the twins.

Wonderful job, as always, and I'm looking forward to more of this story and to see some updates for Compassion.

Nice! Nice nice Nice! can't wait for chapter five i love how you wrote this the whole thing about how different Obi-wan and Anakin are, One calm and clever the other having large problems controlling himself and his rage i love it! Please put chapter five soon!

Thanks again for reviewing my work.

I've just been reading through the first few chapters and thought I'd share my thoughts:

First, your descriptions of people, things, and events are extremely eloquent and complete. The images you draw with words here are impressive. I have to admit, however, that you nearly lost me after the first couple of paragraphs. This has less to do with your style and more with my personal tastes, as this type of flowery, poetic, albeit very descriptive, narrative has never been much for me. But I must say, I was glad that I read on. The plot is very solid thus far and you nailed the characterizations of the these important canon characters. I also couldn't help but notice that, though you said you knew little of the Star Wars Universe, you did an impressive job of navigating therein.

The whole story is infused with an excitement that makes me want to read on still.

I hope you'll do the same and help me to stay on track with my own work.

Thanks again, and I'll be reading!

Awesome chapter :)! keep up the great work definatley can't wait too see whats in store for the upcoming chapters :)! so update when ya can XD! looking foward too it ^-^!

There are so many lovely, lovely elements about this chapter, that I'm not sure where to begin. The action crackles with lightning speed, almost as fast as Anakin or Obi-Wan deflecting blaster-bolts, but in the midst of all this frenetic pace, there are moments of beautiful clarity and calm. Which is, I suppose, the point, as these are Jedi, after all. :o)

Loved the exchange between Obi-Wan and Anakin when he 'drops in', and I especially liked Padme's reaction and how it helped the both of them. The word picture of "She stands between the calm transparisteel of Obi-Wan Kenobi's Soresu and the roiling thunderhead of Anakin's Shien and she knows that she is safe."
is just wonderful. And yet the difference between them later on in the chapter, and how Anakin loses that effortless connection with the Force because he's trying too hard and he's not willing to trust, is really well drawn and clearly defined. The characterizations of all of them - although Padme a little less so - she still seems really vague to me - are exceedingly excellent.

And yes, Obi-Wan blocking that blaster bolt is rather fricking cool. (and painful, it almost made my hand hurt) As is Padme's connection - the description of how it felt is probably as close as any of us will get, too. :o)

I did notice the shout-out - too kind of you, really :o) - and also liked the descriptions of Padme's innermost secrets as being in that locked box - behind that locked door, one she holds closed with all her might. And the discovery of her pregnancy by Obi-Wan is really good - I always thought he must have known, and known there were twins.

Oh, such a good chapter - they just get better and better! Bravo!

WOW. By the Force... your style is amazing, reminiscent of Matthew Stover's when he wrote the RotS Novel. (And my fav author. :-)

Brilliant, just so brilliantly written & put together.
10/10!

Amazing. I have no other words for this. It's just absolutely mindbogglingly amazing. And being the glutton that I am when it comes to good reading and writing, naturally I want more. *bangs head melancholily* Get'cher adverbs here! Really!

Awesome story XD!! Definatley can't wait too see whats in store for the upcoming chapter :)!! so keep up the great work and update when ya can :D! looking foward too it ^-^!

"There was, after all, such as thing as style."

Oh, my gosh - if that's not a terribly delicious summing up of Obi-Wan Kenobi, I don't know what is. *grins* Man, oh, man, what a chapter! I am once again in complete and total awe of your ability with such an immense, incredible fight-scene - not only is there intense action, but there is plenty of time (going at breakneck speed, of course) for some deep introspection as well.

Those little touches of pure Kenobi humor ("May I come in?" and "You...uncivilized harlot!" - oh, I can just hear him saying that, too: for Obi-Wan, that's raw emotion, right there) were priceless, and I loved them. And I appreciated the shout-out to Shaak Ti, too - I love Shaak Ti.

The contrasts between Usaki's want, Obi-Wan's love, and Anakin's fear (and Padme's fear, too, to a lesser extent - it was good to see a bit of her here) were well drawn, too, and one feels Usaki's desperation very clearly, when she realizes that she cannot win.

Really awesome - this is fabulous stuff!

Having read your compelling reasoning for your SW fic, I will continue to read this one. Plus, the action sequence you wrote was flawless--unlike your boo-boos *coughtypostypostyposcough*.

And style is something our dearest Obi-Wan has in spades, along with substance. Style, class, take your pick. A lovely, lovely chapter. It's intriguing, too, the parallels drawn between Anakin and Usaki. They both WANT. They come from two separate worlds. . .Anakin a former slave and Usaki the daughter of privilege, but they both WANT. And Obi-Wan calling Usaki an uncivilized harlot absolutely cracked me up. I can just hear his voice saying that, too. Already seeing the first signs of the attraction between the two of them.