You are obviously not getting enough reviews compared to the amount of talent and skill you have. I must say I believe this is easilly among the top three fics I have ever read.

Not only is the writing stily exciting and captivating, the story itself is great. The way you developed so many different characters with such intensity. It's really rare to read a fic where you actually start to like characters that aren't among the main cast. General Yuung and the freedom fighters were all brilliant.

The way you treated the resistance and the peace treaty, it's all so realistic, the conflict of who's good and who's bad is portrayed beautifuly. (Heck... there are many examples of things like that going on around us in the world.)

I must say I was touched by your fanfic. It's without a doubt one of the best Avatar fics out there, if not the best. I give it a 9 out of 10 (because I believe that to give someone a 10 you have to really know what you're talking about, and though I consider myself a good reader, I think it would be to preposterous to give out 10s to people. It's like saying: "I'm capable of telling that your story has no flaws." And I'm most certainly not.)

Anyway, I hope that you'll see this story to the end. I'm really looking forward to it. I'll try to review more as I read chapter three. I know how satisfying it can be to read reviews, so I'll do my best.)

Oh... And also... one of the high points of your story that separates it from other fics, is that it's not just an excuse to play with pairings. It's actually a story with all the plot elements one should have. I salute you for that, very few people comit themselves so much to the actuall plot.

That's it for this chapter. You'll hear from me again soon. Bye.

The emotional turmoil you set the characters in is compelling and well written. This chapter (or episode, as I think you could safely call it) was grueling for them, but a good adventure tale to me. Now... to insert chapter 3...

Oh my god . . .

Heh, well then!
Lots of build-up...and they never even went into the Fire Nation. Haha. Well, I've personally never cared much for Jet or anyone associated with him, so I didn't find all of that quite as interesting as it deserved...but I still liked it. Some really funny stuff, a lot of intense action, substantial plot (I liked that Fire Nation girl that got killed - she was cute, and the way her story related to everybody was very clever and intense) and overall...quite a good story! I have to love the length, because there's so much to get into everywhere...and yeah! I think that pretty much sums it up, because I'm eager to get onto the third section of Book 3 - which ought to be a killer, right? Right? Please say so!
Whatever, I'll find out when I get there, which should be pretty soon!

Well, it took a while for me to finish this, but it was very good. A bit depressing, still sometimes a story needs that. You handling of the freedom fighters and Colonel Yuung was excellent. You kept it suspenseful without going and killing off any main characters which is always nice. Overall it was a great read and I look forward to reading the third chapter.

OO. Wow. Thats has a lot of deep thought put into it. Can't wait for chapter three! You have started on it right?

Just had to say again how great this story is. Absolutaly blows away anything else like it. I just have oen question: Where do you get your chinese translations from? I can't seem to find a reliable source.
Anyways, take it easy for a while. A long wait is better then a half-hearted rush job.

Wow. Great ending. I feel so bad for the Duke now... If he had just calmly walked up to them instead of yelling out... I can't even imagine how hard it must have been for the gang to just turn and walk away... Wow... This is a really emotionally powerful story. Great job. I'm looking forward to Chapter Three!

Perhaps you could lighten the grimness with some hint of internal humor, something that tells us they have something to cling to in each other? In the nearly 30 years it's been since I first read Lord of the Rings (the first time) I still remember objecting to the unrelenting grimness. I've seen glimpses of humor here, and I think this would be improved if you allowed yourself to insert more. Even gallows humor is better than no humor at all. And I suspect more of the more mature fans among us were drawn as much to that sly laugh as anything else in this epic fantasy.

And yes, I suspect a more heavy editorial hand would be warranted as well. The prose gets a wee bit purple from time to time, to the tale's overall detriment. Ah but, in a sea of drek it does seem unfair to quibble about minor details in the better offerings we see. I'm adding this to my alerts list.

Who didn't see THAT coming? Idiot Sokka, so caught up in his own scheming, that's who. Does this event shave off a bit of his calloused heart? Or merely bury it deeper in protective layers?

Pity. You'd created two lovely OC's. Perhaps they both survived and we'll see them again?

Hmm. Lots to love in this. But I confess, my favorite part was the Oscar Wilde quote in your notes...

I'm a huge Sokka fan, and I just wanted to let you know that I'm finding your version, all sentimentality calloused over, quite compelling. Especially given this hugely credible war setting. We forget how souls are pared away at by desparation.

I'm guessing guilt is part of what is embittering Katara. Toph's selfishness is a given - hell, she's twelve and a lovely tonic to the other twelve year-old's inbred altruism. As for Aang, I confess I want to see more of this semi-catatonic hero before he regains his optimismistic cup half full self.

I LOVE this story. It's so awesome. please write more soon. or i'm gonna die! (okay so maybe a little over dramatic :))

Not sure how I missed this when you first started posting, but then again, I don't hang out here much anymore. TIME is such frugal commodity. That said, I rather like dense, thickly detailed writing, and I'm quite happy with the characterization I'm seeing.
Aang and Toph should manage to pass fairly easily for Fire Nation, but it seems to me that the Water Tribe siblings darker skin tones and strange eye color might attract some notice. On the other hand, maybe people don't look that closely at people after all... especially when they're not expecting to see anything different.
I do hope you don't lose your motivation to finish this. It has a wonderfully interesting beginning.

thank you for this wonderful story. being someone with no talant for writing, i usually don't review as i feel i have nothing constructive to offer anyone writing at your level. so i will just say thank you and hope you go on to chapter 3 soon. maybe you should write something lighter/fun to give yourself a break.

If you want to stay awake eat an apple, it's been proved that it's more effective to make people stay awake. YEY! Zuko and Azula side story! Are Ty Lee and Mai coming back too? And what about Iroh, will you show him anytime soon? Now that my hyperness about the next installment has had its space, I'll review this chapter. It was a lit shorter than usual but just as descriptive, the atmosphere, the growing spectation, the needs of every character, the bleakness... Everything's good as always. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Respectfully,
Chronokinetic