|Reviews for Cold and Dark|
| Bushwah 11/2/12 . chapter 27
Well plotted! Indeed, APPLAUSE.
| Ireland Ranger 10/27/12 . chapter 27
WEeeeeeeeeeeee! LOOOOOK Look! LOOK! A REVEIW FROM THE DEAD! Mwahahaha, sorry about the wait, my computer hates me, as does the rest of the world currently...*sigh*
Okay, this chapter was awesome *sob* and the the final! I totally loved how Rasouk was head over heels in joy at having Rorac his unhappy captive :) I could just picture him prouncing about in a feild of flowers, singing about all the fun they were going to have with poor Skipper Rorac flung over his shoulder...
Or shall I say EX-skipper Rorac...*glares*
I was rather heart-struck when Skipper lost his title...I'llbe sore over that for a while now. :(
But now I must wonder what you'll be workin' on next! I know I've still got about 15 chapters until Captured in the Dark is done, I'm just stuck on ENDING this current chapter (it's wicked, forcing me to be blank so long...) *sigh*
Anywho, GRAND MARVELOUSHAPPYSADAWESOME STORY! When I get a pet otter (perhaps in fairy-land) I will name him Rorac...YUP!
Hehehehehehehe, anywho...don't get blown away by the coming storm if you're on the east coast like I am...wait...I'M GONNA BE THE ONE BLOWN AWAY! NOOOOoOOOOoOOooooooOOOOOooOO OOOoooo
...okay, I'm over it XD
| lkcrm94 10/13/12 . chapter 27
Wow, I've just read this fanfic in its entirety, and I'm really impressed! I'll keep this review short, but I think the characters were interesting, the plot was exciting, and it was structured very well too (e.g. no huge blobs of text). Well done!
| Hera Ledro 10/13/12 . chapter 27
A most excellent chapter. It works well as a post-climax falling action. The main thing of note that I'd like to address is, perhaps predictably, the relationship between Rasouk and Rorac.
We discussed previously the signs of homoeroticism in your work, and if you were aiming to quash such signs, I'm afraid that this chapter did little to do so. Again, I can't see Rorac and Rasouk as a couple (at least not as a successful one), but in spite of your insistence in this chapter that Rorac is seen exclusively as a father figure by Rasouk, there is a great deal of one-way homoeroticism from Rasouk to Rorac in this chapter and the last few. I think that here, the insistence that Rasouk identifies Rorac as a surrogate/substitute father actually works against you if you're trying to avoid the homoeroticism. Given the nature of Rasouk's intentions for Rorac - and given the closeness in age - it seems inevitable that there will be, to use the common phrase, 'Ho Yay'. By insistently having Rasouk refer to Rorac as a false father, it adds a sense of denial to the text that (believe me) many people may latch onto as 'proof' that there is a homoerotic element to their relationship, that they are in fact compatible. This is neither a criticism nor a warning nor praise, simply an observation given the nature of our previous discussions.
But moving on from that, another thing that I continue to enjoy is your juxtaposition of identity and 'labelling', or how you discuss the connection of naming and identity, again in the form of Miru/Dernwyn. Dernwyn is the prince, Miru is the abbey-beast. This is a theme that I always enjoy reading about, because it is very much a real issue for some people.
I also like how you've portrayed Zurzak, though I will accede that I find it a tad cliche. The person who commits evils in the name of good only to realize at the last moment that they are in fact evils is a common archetype nowadays, and is almost a stereotype (though I won't deny employing cliches in my own work). Something that I think would have made him more convincing - though he was still a very chilling and frightening character, and for that I salute you! - would have been related to his dialogue. In your desire to keep much of his past life a secret, he returned constantly to the same cyclical arguments to justify his actions. Done properly - i.e. sparingly - this can make for a very convincing 'sane' madman, the madman who is insane but is calculating enough to keep his insanity only bubbling below the surface before it bursts out in the final confrontation. In the case of Zurzak, his only driving argument was the same cyclical one, which made him in my eyes less effective than he could have been. Nonetheless, I think that you hit the nail on the head with the aspect you were trying to show the most: that Zurzak is a frightening creature, a monster that would haunt your nightmares as he did Miru's. In that aspect, I think you did wonderfully.
I have little else to say, but I would like to reiterate that you've done a wonderful job with this. Any flaws I've pointed out are a pittance compared to what you've excelled at. I'm also sorry we haven't had much chance to talk in recent months; it would be a gross understatement for me to say I've been busy. I may get 1-2 hours to myself a day, after counting work, traveling, and writing my book. Nonetheless, I wish you all the best!
| Jiago Brandtail 10/12/12 . chapter 27
Whew! It's been a long journey with this story! Congratulations for reaching the end! XD
This chapter concludes things very well. It was great to see Dernwyn take the lead in saving Skipper, I wouldn't have thought the frail pine marten from the beginning could come so far. Their friendship is quite endearing, so I was quite hooked in the last fight with Rasouk. Even though he was a lot of trouble, I'm kind of glad he went off South as planned. Rorac's nightmare was one last chilling moment, I must say. XD
One thing to me seems unresolved, and that is Dernwyn's kingdom. However, unless you have some specific plan for an epilogue, I guess we can just assume they got along with a new leader.
All round, this is one of my all time favourite stories. It's moving, it can be funny and heartwarming, and the characters are very memorable and clearly defined.
I don't know if you're planning a new Redwall story, especially after the length of time and effort this took. But I hope to see more of your writing around some time! Thanks for taking us on this journey. : D
| Lord Vrel 10/12/12 . chapter 27
That was EXCELLENT.
Beautiful ending. That's all I can really think to say...
It's dissapointing though, that it IS the end. :(
Oh well. Now you'll have time to work on MORE stories! :D
I really enjoy how the whole Rasouk thing wrapped up too. Nicely done.
I think the only thing that could have made this story more awesome is if... Something... Somethinged!
Okay, I really can't think of any way that would make it even better.
*bro-huggles* Thanks mate, for the time and enjoyment you've given all of us readers. I truly feel that you're one of the few authors that can really open that door into excitement and imagination. :)
| ferretWARLORD 10/12/12 . chapter 27
That was probably the best ending i have ever read on fanfiction. Not too many ff have the ending i like, but that was beautiful. I really liked the fight scene in that, really suspenseful. God im so happy Rasouk had a good ending! I loooovved it!
- your now crazed fan,
| Pit Viper of Doom 10/12/12 . chapter 27
That was amazing. Wow. Really, just everything was wrapped up so neatly and tied up in a cheery little bundle. Zurzak's at peace, Rasouk's leaving for good (at least until he makes a return in my fic, teehee), and everything's all neat and clean and happy.
Miru's fight with Rasouk was awesome. I'm not sure what else to say about it. That was just so freakin cool. As was his pre-asskicking one-liner. "Like hell." Amazing.
At long last, the story's finished! Goodness me.
| Ireland Ranger 7/30/12 . chapter 26
Right, sorry for not reviewing right away...I've been busy for the past week and I didn't get a chance to even glance at this till now...soooo
:-C ok, now I feel guilty for having hated Zurzak...poor scary-looking kitty...he had the right intentions, but didn't know how to go about it...(probably too much cat nip ;D)
The dream was highly weird, but not in a bad way lol. It was perfect for the story, though confusing a bit.
I'm going to guess that the shadow might be Rasouk...or somebeast like that...btw that was just mean what you did to Skip...that evil foxey has him in his claws again and poor skipper's got a headache! lol, I hope he gets some iced cream or something for acting this out in your head! getting tied up, knocked out, man-handled, knocked out again...that otter's just got plain bad luck! :D
So yea, this review is shorter then most...but my cousin's over so I can't stay here and chat on the computer all night...
Poor Zurzack, maybe he'll visit Miru in his dreams eh? Well, toodles for now!
| ferretWARLORD 7/29/12 . chapter 26
Wow. That was just... So satisfying. Really. This is a really compelling and tear jerking one, and I can't beleive I dont have this on my favourites... Although we are literally b**** slapped (sorry fer the language) with Rasouk dragging skipper off. Gosh darn it.
| Jiago Brandtail 7/28/12 . chapter 26
I knew it!
Well, I didn't know it. But I suspected! The earlier chapters gave me some idea.
I don't like reviews with spoilers, so I won't say much. Just, very well done indeed. A very enjoyable chapter, and I'm glad to see we still have some more of the adventure to go yet. This is really one of the most outstanding Redwall stories I've read here, and I have read quite a few. Keep it up!
...Knew it. Sort of. XD
| Pit Viper of Doom 7/27/12 . chapter 26
Yeah, I was a bit jarred by the inclusion of Bright and Warm, but oh well, because this was an awesome chapter.
I like how you used an actual bizarre symbolic dream rather than the normal dreaming-of-the-literal-past dream. Nice touch, there. And that was a good ending for Zurzak; I look back now, and it occurs to me that he's always been really affectionate with Miru, and it's just the fact that he's really creepy about it that made him look evil.
| Lord Vrel 7/27/12 . chapter 26
Damn yooooouuuuu! XD
Cliffhangers! Grr! XDXD
Lol. You were right though, After reading the first few lines, I DID go back to check your stories list.
Anyway, as good as Zurzak was when he died, and how sorry I had to feel for him... I still was very happy to read his death. Gosh DANGIT he was creepy... "No goodbye kiss?" just sealed the deal. *shudders* creeeeeepy... But at least, he redeemed himself.
And the shadowy figure is obvious. It was BATMAN! Yay!
Seriously though, let's git sum Rasouk getting his rear kicked by a certain otter/marten duo! Yeeeeah! :)
I can't wait for the next chapter! *squee!*
Oh, and btw, we need to get Vrel and Kelaiah out sometime to hunt down certain vermin and teach THEM how to cut tales off! GRRRRR. That part still just makes me wanna... GRRRR!
Stupid vermin being poopheads!
*breathes* ANYWHO... As I said, I can't wait for the next chapter! I'm assuming there's only gonna be one or two more though... That'll suck. :(
We want more! We want more!
| W. Lady Death 7/23/12 . chapter 25
You. Did. Not. Just. Do. That…
I'm upset that you left me hanging like that, but your writing is phenomenal! I love your masterpiece to bits! Your story is insane, amazing, and twisted wonderfully! Please update soon, and keep up the AWESOME work!
Welcome Lady Death
| Pit Viper of Doom 7/23/12 . chapter 25
Okay, that was amazing. Really good chapter. Ohmygosh, I can't wait for the next one.
Man, I've been wondering about why Zurzak's so obsessed with Miru. Hope we get to find out. Also, I liked that little title drop at the very end, that was a nice touch.