lol...i liked it a lot a lot a lot!

I think it seemed more lighthearted than it appears you tried to make it sound. It was all nice and merry and fast until the last line. It was kinda...weird. But a good idea.

Not bad, but nothing spectacular. It could be more developed and more...poetic, I guess.

That was really in character. :) To everyone else: I realized that all the authors give high scores, 9/10's to everyone else. It's because they don't rate stories that are terrible truthfully because they don't want to make enimies and have that person give them the same rating.

Nice. I like how u made it sound...well, lite. Uh, like how it's like a little kid's poem. *Ad begins here* Please check out mine. "As I sit here." I'll probably upload it later today. *Ad ends here* I didn't copy! Really! It was up Forlay's site awhile ago... ::Runs of as a bunch H.U.N.S. (read Pure Insanity 7) attack her::

OOOH, deep. Very deep.