Wow, I've been away for a while...too long in fact...ok, from now on I'll make more of an effort to keep up! Interesting chapter, nice cliffhanger at the end(literally)! Erol's turning into a meanie again, but I'm hoping he'll get over it. And Fionn can speak to trees...intriguing o.O.
Oh, Fionn might be evil, eh? That would certainly be surprising. I can't imagine him as evil...he's too happy and innocent :D
The dream was a bit odd, but it was certainly well-written. for a moment I thought you had actually killed off Fionn! That would have been horrible...he's such an entertaining character XD
Interesting chapter, Fionn finally knows about Light and Dark now...and the scene with Dark Jak was certainly intense.
It was nice to hear what was going on with Torn and Ashelin back in Haven...we hadn't heard about them for a while. Heh heh, Torn's slowly going insane...lucky he has Ashelin there.
Anyways, good chapter, looking forward to reading the next one!
I'm not dead yet I can dance and I can sing! I'm not dead yet *smacked with frying pan* alright I'll get on with it!
Anyway, so I'm not dead and am still reading this fic! Things have been really crazy with moving to University and getting myself all settled in. I feel bad for leaving this for so long, so I guess I'll get to it :D
Basically, same things I've been saying all along really. I didn't have any major complaints about anything here, and I thought you did a really good job on it. The cliff hanger was, indeed, and extremely evil thing to do to your loyal readers, but I suppose I can let it slide seeing how the quality of your writing does permit you to do things like that.
Basically, keep doing what you're doing, and I will await your next installment!
Oh yes, damn those blond monkeys...um... yes, anyway, very interesting Corad, Fionn has hypnotic powers! Yay! And that flashback was very interseting too...Fi might have an older sister...0.o. Great chapter Corad!
Whew! Good thing Fionn-Ro didn't die! You didn't want to kill off your OC, huh? Good choice. It would be awfully boring if he wasn't around with Jak. His clumsiness and timid actions make me laugh. Although his suicide attempts, as well as his reason for killing himself, were extremely creepy...(Shudders)You've made one complex character, Corad! (Claps) Though I wonder what made him scream...Oh well, at least he' alive! (Grins) The part when he said Yes in Japanese was suprising, as well as Jak's reaction. So your incorperating some words that you learned from the CD you bought, into your fics, now? Great! It's been a while since I've seen, much less heard, another language, and it's kind of a wake-up call for me to start watching anime again. I haven't seen an episode of Bleach in ages! (Laughs) I never knew Fionn had scars, and for him not to remember how he got them makes him even more mysterious. Hm...Perhaps he obtained them from that fatal battle involving Matai and the wolves? The fact that everything avoids Fionn while he's traveling is strange. Maybe they stay away from him because of what he is...Or maybe he just knows how to keep out of danger, since he's not much of a fighter, as seen with his and Jak's encounter with the Metal Head. How big is it, anyway? One thing is sure: It's pretty intelligent, seeing as it tracked them in such a shot amount of time. Wonder how Jak and Fionn will get out of this situation alive...Anyways, keep up the good work, okay? You are a talented author! And update soon, okay?
Yep, you did send me this one. Don't worry. I remember it.
You're not the only one getting back into your fanfictions, December's gone for a week and I actually have some motivation to get work done on AFRAT and THOAW.
Good chapter. I don't think cliffhangers suck, unless I'm being given them, but they're sure fun to leave. :D
Great chapter! Yay Erol! He seems to be having an identity crisis at the moment, trying to remain his "big bad" self :P
Poor Torn, having to deal with rats and the like. I reckon when Jak returns to Haven all the problems will be so bad that he'll want to leave :P
Fionn's communicating with trees is...strange. He's definitely an enigma still _ Looks as if Jak'll either have to use his Wolf side or Light Jak to save Fionn...or maybe something else will happen and Fi will be able to fly himself? :P Just guessing here _
Okay, what exactly was the point of the dynamite and Jinx? Amusement factor? Or is there something else? Is Jak going to get back only to find the entire city overrun by rats?
Ripp: Are you and idiot?
GreyJedi: Yes I am. Thank you for noticing.
Ripp: O_o
GreyJedi: I still don't know what Fi is. I never actually did brush up on my Japanese mythology, though I get the feeling if I had, I might know what he is now.
Nice cliffhanger by the way. Nearly as nasty as the ones I leave, but you've never killed off a main character, so I'm not too worried.
Hm...that was interesting. For some reason I'm getting a strange feeling that Fionn had something to do with that white wolfish creature, or perhaps he WAS it. But I'm probably wrong. Anyways, great chappie, looks like they're finally starting to catch up to Jak now...It'll be interesting when they find him!
Umm...yeah...I know its been a while, but we kinda lost our internet for ages, so I couldn't read any more...stupid internet(kicks modem). Anyway, good chappie, maybe not the most interesting, but it still had some vital information. So Fionn's getting his memories back, eh? Hm...I'd like to find out who he was supposed to be protecting...well, I'll just have to read more and find out, won't I?
An interesting chapter...again, there wasn't much action in it, but I like it that way. The part about Jak staring into Fionn's eyes and comparing them to a demon was a bit eerie,and strangely ironic, seeing that Jak already has/is a demon himself (aka Dark). Great detail, I enjoyed reading it. When I read the part where Fionn pointed to a brightly-lit sign, I though of one of those flashy, blinking-on-and-off, neon signs, akwardly. Never thought a weapons shop would be very flashy, but that's just my imagination, not yours. (Grins) Wonder where the shop owner got a Morph Gun...Those things don't seem very useful now that I've read this chapter. Strange...They're always useful in the games! Probably because I kept relying on it so much; Gets me out of an area pretty quick...Either that, or I suck/keep dying on the missions! (Laughs) The incident with Dark Jak and the thugs was a bit suprising, but I loved reading it. Its nice to a scene with Darkie in it, even if all he does is beat up/kill stuff. Eh, what else is he useful for? XD This is probably going to be my favorite chapter because of it. Light appearing and healing Fionn's throat was a bit suprising too, but makes sense. Hope he finds a Light Eco vent soon...The section ending was creepy, but again is logical. I also enjoy the chapter ending, especially with the Torn X Ashelin action that occured. Both of them try hard not to care for one another, but always end up doing so. Kind of cute...:D Your Author's Note at the end was so amusing. I've actually never heard/read you cuss before (usually Sharok does it) but its fine. Overall, this was a wonderful chapter, and tied very well into your series. Sorry for the late/long review! Keep up the great work and update soon, okay?
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