This fic deserves far more reviews in my opinion. Very well written, your grasp of English, particularly with it not being your first language, is excellent, as is your grammar. The chess metaphor is well chosen and well used, without being over-used.

I shall add this story to my favourites, and hope that you get some more well-deserved praise for it. Keep up the excellent work.

Zephyr5

Why why why must you always make me cry? It's not very nice ya know!

Again, wonderful.

"razor-sharp and dangerous and free to walk away – only neither of us ever would"

Stunning, powerful, impressive. I was forced to double-take while reading this, unbelieving at some points of what I read, unsure if it was actually there or simply my imagination. It was an effort in understanding the mysteries of the universe and the mind, pertually confronting and at times horrendous, sprinkled with delicious speculation.

It seems as if those who have not been using the language have a far greater grasp of it than those who have been using - and perverting - it all their lives. You learn something new every day.

Beautiful and stunning. Those are the only words that come to mind. You did a lovely job on this story, capturing both men. I love the flow and imagery; nicely done. Hope you won't mind me adding this to my C2.

I LOVE it.
-Kozi

it was lovely

This is a very good little story and I liked it a lot so great job!

And you were worried??!! Great Job!

Hmm. Nicely written for a non-native speaker of English (I came here from LJ where you mentioned that). A brief scene, but one that contains a great deal nevertheless.

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful.

-happy little dance with clapping involved-

I very much like it! I can't really describe why, but you've captured a certain feeling... I love it.
Thanx for sharing!

I just wanted to tell you that I never would have guessed that English is not your first language. Very nicely done. The story is very beautifully written and the imagery is lovely. :)

A very good story, done in all sort of shades of grey. I really like the last sentence.
I'm looking forward to another HP story of yours.

They are indeed.