 Akino Ame 2007-01-24 . chapter 1I ordinarily enjoy your stories greatly, but this one seemed to fall flat. The conflict was resolved too quickly for there to be any chance for character interaction and development--it felt like "We came, we saw, we conquered, want to go to dinner?" And unfortunately, that whole feeling seems to come from the League's presence--with so many resources, fighting a single terrorist threatening is easy. The fic really felt like it could have had a lot more to it, given the chance for something to go wrong--someone else wasn't available, or Red Claw had a contingency plan. This just felt weak. |