i lovee it

Great! Just great! You managed to capture the emotion of that scene perfectly! I commend you for your accomplishment.

Wow.

That was well-written. Well done! I would not have given their fight as much thought as you had; you made it seem so...lively and real, as though this was the battle to settle everything else in their lives.

I... don't know what to say... It was so beautifully written! It was like giving their last battle a whole new view! ^^ I really liked Asch, and I definately cried when he died. I actually knew that he would die and that caused me to not save the game a couple of times - re-battling Asch again and again. This piece gave me a whole new view of the fight and what they could have been thinking about. What else to say... I just loved it! You gave me inspiration to start my next Abyss fanfic! Thanks!

Ah, really nice job! You described the fight scene quite well - something I can never do. And you kept both Luke and Asch perfectly in character. I love all their lines and how they interacted with each other.

Just a little spelling glitch - "for more quickly" should be "far." But otherwise you're great.

Very good work.

Great job! I love how you depicted both Asch and Luke's thoughts before they fought. Your fights scenes were also beautifully executed (the battle actually seemed reminiscent to Vash and Knives' final confrontation in Trigon; Er, lacking firearms of course ^^;). It's too bad they didn't use their more powerful artes against one another though; oh well, I still enjoyed it nonetheless.

Go go gadget account...!

Yo Vil, that opening...uh...section of the story was just perfect to me! I loved how you touched on all their differences throughout the story despite Luke being a perfect replica, and went pretty deep into them, too.

"Asch’s look was back, too, but the only emotion that existed with his determination was anger." LOVED THIS SENTENCE, DUDE.

K, keep writing, please!

Very nice, Vil. I could go into details on it, but suffice it to say, you pulled me away from the All-Star Game. You know where that stands.

Wow. I wish I had your gift for describing fight scenes. I'm terrible at those.

This is really good, though. I like the opposing themes that resound through the story. Great job!