It's pretty good for a first fic. It's also about on of my favourite games, so bonus points! However, there were a few grammatical errors, but they didn't detract from the story all that much.

I liked how you expanded on the original game and added Resistances from the other areas of New York, and slotting in the Japanese was a nice surprise too. Looking forward to more!

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I like it good job.

It is very good however more chapters would be nice

Wow nice story. Thats all i can say. so far

"It passed the first test . . . I didn't go blind."

Definatly dose show promise and to Jin Won not every single Russian sais comrade you idiot. But anywho good story but keep practicing.

I'll try to keep it short and sweet, your story is okay. No real description, if I was not to know who Chris Stone was and how he looked I would be reading about faceless ghouls and your scenery description is not good either. I give it a 4/10.

Also: I doubt a Russian would say "sir" more likely he would say comrade.

This story shows some promise. Hopefully, it'll get better as the story continues.