A little bittersweet but very nice. Great close to cannon characterizations.

Okay, I like it, but its gotta be Ron and Hermione! (:

Oh My God! You wrote my favourite pairing! Jessica! I love you! And I love the story! (I know you said you didn't want useless squeeing, but, honestly, what do you expect?!? You wrote H/Hr!). So, here goes.

It would probably present a bit better if you separated off her thought quote like it was speech. Or maybe italicised it (but that's just a stylistic point, purely a matter of preference. I'm trying to find some criticism here!). And include more complex sentences. But I am beginning to feel a little like an English teacher here, because all I can comment on is your writing technique; as a one shot, as a vignette, it's very sweet. And the pairing is perfect ;).

Write more of these!

Freya x

i remember reading this in PSHE! hmm hehe u no wat i realised tht the title is ONE day and its ONE shot...coincidence? lol jks...

Ugh, Harry/Hermione... :p
Even so, I like the writing. Very realistic adolesent emotion.
Hehehe I used big words!

great ch, love it! lol! do more i want this continued! xx

Tom and mark say :
this story needs more smut

that was cute! I DEMAND *nicely of course!!:)* a sequel!!

Loved it! Very cute. I really like the one-shot, but this is definitely one that could turn into a few chapters if you wanted. Very well-written

you should make this into a multi chapter story! it has so much potential! even so i still loved it

That's very good. You should write a sequel "This Day" or something of the sort in which she tells him.

Looks like she left it too late. Was there a point to this story? Cos it might've been a better scene were it a paragraph in a multi-chapter fanfic, rather than a disconnected drabble.