lol! really really cute.

That was AWESOME!!
I loved how it was entirely dialogue.
You're so good at this!!
~ Y

aWW so CutE...

kEeP oN WriTing!

Aw... So cute! And so in character! Loved it ^^

So cute!

"Aho...quit smirking..."

CUTIE!
So sweet! I like it!

Adorable...

“MAYBE I WANT TO!”

“WHAT!?”

XD loved that part^^ Even if it's hard to know who says who I kinda get it anyway^^ So cute XD

It was funny, although I was confused with the dialogue a bit. It took me a third reading to get it.

You should have added action between the two to make it more interesting. Nevertheless, it was nice.

It was cute...but you could have made it more interesting by putting in some actions done by Heiji/Kazuha.

Also, I was a bit confused on which dialogue was said by what character..I'm still trying to figure it out, even now, so don't make the same mistake, k?