it's good, I like how it doesn't have to have a story behind it, it's finally one of those stories where they just embrace the love they have for each other and don;t care what people think, that's the kind of love that should be in all odd couples. so what if they're younger or older or the same sex. my motto: screw what the people think, as long as I'm with the one I love, I don't care

*drools*
You know what's even better than a One-shot?? A very well written one-shot!!

I liked it. Details, memories, etc. Great voice, vocabulary, and I like how their relationship was revealed through thoughts, actions, and memories.

The only thing I was mildly annoyed at was the bold and underlined thoughts. They were too bold and underlined... hell for my eyes.

wow that was pretty devilishly wicked. sakura and kakashi(sexy beast) is all gd i wish there were more of us kakasaku fans
in the world. keep writing love

xoxoxo

It was great! I loved it, it was really original.

Wow. Very good! It's like telling two stories in one. ;)

I liked it, I could see what you meant by erratic because at times it took a minute to follow the train of thought but I can say the story made the journey worth it. Sorry train of thought analogy taken too far.

This was really surprisingly good. It was a trifle confusing in parts with not knowing which time segment he was currently remembering or if it was in the present. Normally I find broken paragraphs to distract from a piece of writing but it worked fine in this case.

I loved it. :D So..descriptive. I love KakaSaku.

You know, this is one of the few stories I come back and read again and again. It's just so beautifully written. I love how you juxtapose the story of their relationship alongside the story of their lovemaking, cut up with his own guilty thoughts. Excellent job.

That was strangly VERY good! I usually don't like the stories with those little sentences breaking up the actual story, but, I really liked it. I hope that you will write another one.

~Bubbles

It was awsome, i really liked it : )

Wonderful job...not as good as icha icah sakura...but great all the same!~Sierra of keymasters

You should definately be pleased with yourself! That was amazing...it would definately make a person blush for sure. Great job!

This is great O_O
Beautiful lemon clips... zomg, love itt!! ^.^
You should write more lemon like this, or perhaps more lemon that holds the whole scene.

AyumiAi ♥