It's a good plot.. Hao's past is kind of close to his original past ;) ;) (check mappa douji if you want to find out)

I've read your profile and I understand that you're not that good in spelling and grammar.But I believe that every week or so, lets us read again the guidelines for uploading new stories. And if you read it properly, the first part contains *writer's etiquette* meaning if you have uploaded this story, you have agreed and accepted the guidelines have set.

I'm telling this so that you can improve your grammar. Try reading books about grammar (or take lessons).

I myself is not that good in grammar but I always try my best to make it right.. maybe you could find someone who could do proofreading for you ( I have two friends who helps me with that) .
And I'm not telling you not to hate flames but sometimes people are just wanted to tell you that something is wrong with your story and you have to make certain revisions to prevent deleting it.

awesome can't wait to find out the next chapter!

good story

Is this a prologue?

I' want to know what happens next