Aw! That is so cute!

you are the meanest girl i have ever seen... how can yopu say that about your stories i loved the chickenbox story and the true or dare story it was abslotly adorble beside the first story and the card story you wrote the best story i have readed so far! i will be waiting for the 4th chapter and i will die if you coudn't make it is good as them or even better will i will be waiting for you^^

This was awesome. I hope you have gotten over the story I submitted a long time ago and review my stories again. Will you? I've actually IMPROVED as a writer and I hope you will review each chapter from chapter 7 on to 20 of "Jimmy and Rachel Together". It's finally done.
--Mathew

I liked it a lot...
and besides french kissing isn't a sin, unless u already have someone with u(or when ur married)if ur couples with a strong relationship, french kissing won't be bad...

Squee! UBER CUTE!

chibi-Ran and chibi-Shinichi are just too cute! You have a lovely writing style and well I like it. Hope you update sooner. Really soon!

oh wow! that chickenpox story! it was so cute!! #^O^# ((ok, this is getting really scary.. I'm starting to sound a LOT, either like Yukiko, Kazuha, or Sonoko, and I can't seem to stop the tranformation!! O_oUU ))

I love those pre-conan one-shots though!! They're always so interesting...

By the way, I was the anon. Rani..! (uuhh.. I've no idea why I even SAID that..it's so obvious. lol) I'm so happy I finally got an account though... I wanted to post a story for Valentine's Day, but I have to wait for 3 days to do so... T_T
oh well! Good luck with your next one-shot! I'll definitely be waiting! n_n

Well, since this one is long enough, I suppose I should give you some long constructive criticism, although I'm not too good at that.

First of all, the title would make one think as if Shinichi's got a fatal disease (the same for the summary). Did you intend it that way, or did you merely not notice it? Also, the thin "scroll-thing" in the scroll bar made it look as if something dramatic was to happen. But I guess not. You're a happy-go-lucky girl, aren't you?

You know, Inseparable was so cute! At first I thought that Ran-chan was such a cry baby, but then, they're only five years old for crying out loud! So, I suppose it was natural that Ran would cry. And yeah...I predicted that Ran would get the ailment as well.

Paranormal Deception's omake was a bit weird (I suppose you made this omake in an effort to please readers? The fact that you made Ran say "I lied" made that rather apparent.). I mean, how in the world did Ran get those special abilities? I'm siding with Shinichi--probability was merely on her side! And yes, the ending...so reminds me of Contact Lenses.

Both of them are not too long, although they still are, and I applaud you for that (I'm jealous...wa...I'm jealous of everyone). You only had a lot of breaks in it--thus making it so--mind if I say it in Tagalog?--bitin. Oh, and before I forget, Inseparable had a bit of predictability about Ran getting it as well.

All in all, though, good work! Please watch out for "A Matter of Time," pweety pwease? I hope I get it posted before February ends. Happy birthay! You're like a sister to me already, you know that?

PS: Wow! We both have the chickenpox? The world is such a small place now...

Wow!! That's all I can say. You know, when I suggested a pool party/day at the beach of Jimmy and Rachel together, just imagine episodes of Serena and Rachel (and Conan) on the beach. Then, use the same style of writing you did to your chapters, especially this one and you'll get a lot of good reviews from others -- especially myself!!
--Mathew

Hm, that was good. ^0^ I think I'd have liked it even better if they actually tried the telepathy for real though. Woulda been much fun. XDD

Looking forward to these drabbles as well (as Ivory Petals')!

Aww, ESP! It was good, but I kinda found it weird when Ran kissed Shinichi-kun out of the blue. I would've liked it if they were really doing the activity! Sometimes, subtle romance is so much better than mushy kissing scenes.

Anyway, goodluck with the rest! Wish me luck too. I have 38 more to go, and there are many more in my mind...

-Ivory Petals

Great Story so far, can't wait for the next one. So hopefully you update soon, and hear from you soon. Cya l8ter!

Thanx,

SangoShadowMage

Aww...That was cute.I look forward to reading your next one.

Btw,I come from the Philippines too cept'that I'm seventeen and am just about to graduate high school.^^

Now, THIS I like. Ivory Petals' story, and this one by you are both equally entertaining. Like I suggested to Ivory Petals, maybe you should try making a chapter of a private pool party or a day at the beach with just Jimmy and Rachel together. You don't have to use this suggestion, but I just thought I'd say it right now. I'd like to see you try it just so I can see how you do with scenes by a pool or on the beach. I hope you'll review my stories again soon.
--Mathew

Very cute! It's nice to see Ran gain the upper hand for once, isn't it? :D I look forward to more!

i liked the 1st story..!! it was short and sweet *-*
good luck with the other one-shots..! im glad someones writing another set of shinXran!