I love it. That little bit where Youji's thinking about the effect of rain on their surroundings makes me want to make bad art ;) & I like how you weave back & forth between the differences between him & Ken, in their observations & in their appearances - it goes well w/ the sort of jumbled atmosphere that's been set by the weather. & how you repeated certain thoughts & motifs but in an interesting rather than trite way. I got the impression of a moment frozen in time in this odd, surreal landscape. (I like how Youji thinks of Ken as "a problem" to be solved, too.) Guess, basically, I like... everything!

Oh, & the last sentence certainly makes an impression.

Only thing I have a problem with is the parenthetical sentences - well, I didn't exactly mind them, exactly, but I didn't find them necessary, either. (Guess it's just personal preference/style.)

It's rather depressing...like a lot of your fics, but so well written that it's just a piece of art.
Your character-interpretation is great and fitting and you always manage to create atmosphere and implied deepness...

Huh, now if only you'd write something a bit happier...preferably with an happy ending for Ken and Yohji...together...^^°
Hey, I'm just daydreaming, no need to feel pressured.

misere

This is just lovely.

Ohh, much love for this piece. You explore both of the characters so extremely well in one setting, making the exploration natural instead of forced with your writing. It's brilliant.

I loved the little section on how they really have nothing alike except for the thing they won't talk about; it's something we know, but rarely think about. And then the street description of the rain and colors is gorgeous. And then the "(He knows Ken is real.)" is STUNNING. You time these sorts of little impacts so well.

M, love their dialogue. Very natural and at the same time, in this moment, very important. You write these two so well.

Cold!Ken with bare arms! Squee! ... sorry, it's just a little sexy and I'm weird like that. Ahem. Oh, then the bit where it occurs to Yohji he could lose Ken forever in the crowd because of how normal he looks-- oh, I love that. LOVE love love that. And then, "wonders, only half-jokingly, how to solve a problem like Ken."

You write so goddamn well. I've missed it. :)

And the ending. God.

For a small character piece, it's sure damn amazing and going on my favorites NOW.