Wow! I read the first version of this fic 2 years ago and thought it was really good. This newer version, however, is much better... easier to read, better descriptions, etc. I thought it wouldn't be interesting to read the "same" thing over again, but I was drawn in by the story.

Anyway, the only problems I noticed were a few mistake in capitalization, run-on sentences, and extra comma in one sentence. None of them bothered me anyway... I'm no English professor and I could the story without pausing to figure out what was written.

I really enjoyed the first one and I hope the remaining chapters are as good as the prologue of this revised version. You have definitely improved... not that you weren't to begin with. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Fantastic use of language! The twist of words here and there, the turn of phrase, the evocative descriptions, it's all fantastic! IN the first paragraph alone, the descriptions exploded from the monitor! I am particularly fond of the phrase, "The treasures of the elements; Fire, Water and Earth." That's a nice way of putting it :D

Throughout the chapter, I both frowned (Link didn't seem like a 10-year-old, and he seemed to be bipolar. He was angry when he bumped into her, but docile when he went to apologise) and grinned. Battle tunic: Now there's a name. A neat battle tunic. *drools*

A huge improvement from the original I so dearly fell in love with. I'm glad you didn't change too much, just tweaked the language and interractions a little bit, but overall kept true to the first story I considered a favourite. I very much look forward to the revival of a great!

~Link