love the story its amazingly wicked funny, cant wait to read more

THIS IS AWESOME! ITS GOT TO BE ONE OF MY FAVORITE FMA FICS EVER! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!

-Audra

Arue-chan it's called Rizembool.

THIS IS NOT A FLAME! I repeat, this is not meant to be a flame. This is a real critique from a reader who wants to see you improve. I read this, and I will say that it DOES have potential. Unfortunately, your spelling and grammar need a lot of work. The mistakes tend to jar the reader out of the story, so it's hard to focus on what's actually going on. A good spell checker will clear most of it up, but does not catch everything, which is why it is important to proofread your work, and have your beta do so, as well. The other problem is your characterization of the canon characters. I really like the idea of Mustang freaking out over you and your friend calling him Dad, but I highly doubt he'd try to kill you over it. Chew you out, yes...kill you, no. Keeping the canon characters in character during strange situations can be challenging, but ultimately funnier in the end. I also like the randomness of your main characters, but at times, they tend to be too random, and the whole point of the conversation is lost. Anyway, this definitely isn't the worst fic I've ever come across, and with some improvement, it definitely could be one of the funniest self inserts out there. Anyway, please think about what I've suggested, and good luck with everything in the future.

awesome stuff, better then any other fic where the writer enters the world! keep it coming!

LMAO. That was certainly funny.

Gotta love the "Axel's an alchemist?" part xD Could be longer, but it's okay.

And yes, I suck at reviews. Especially now, because here in Sweden, where i live, it's 03.33 on the morning. Maybe it's called 03.33 AM?