I went with zad?

Lol, when you mentioned the merman I was thinking Nereus comes to visit! Although, now that's kinda hard since you... stabbed him... heh heh. "I started to smile. He was a hot merman." LOL!

What does he want with Belle? Hm...

Something in the tub O_o

Aw, the slow-dancing part was so sweet... curse that interruption!

I figure you inspired to throw in the mermaid from the movie we watched together eh? ^^

stop making me login to review! XD shopping! what's in the tub?

Sounds like I was forced to go shopping, lol. I want to rip Belle to pieces... gr... and poor Momiji!

“At least Gary goes grope Lizzy to death unlike your dates” hee hee, I think you meant, “At least Gary DOESN'T grope Lizzy to death, unlike your dates” Just a bit confusing with the typo, that's all.

Is the word you're looking for the appendix? I know some people have to get those removed...

Great job! As usual, you have all our personalities captured perfectly! Write chapter 8!!

"I’m ugly. I’m mean and not fun to hang out with nor talk too at all." NOT TRUE! .:hugs Sara:.

Yes, your character seemed to need to vent in this chapter... I liked the dialog on the phone with Zad at the start. And when you told him off at the end, that was great!

Who could that be on the phone? dun dun dun.

Lol, Kagura is funny. "YOU'RE BREAKING MY HOUSE!" lol!

Momiji in the hospital?! SAD! KILL BELLE! WHAT A SKANK!

ah stop making me sign in! XD What's the bad news?!

ah stop making me login! XD you're giving me a guy? hahahha nice. whose on the phone?!

I love the story so far! I think one sentence was weird, the "a fork on the board and made ear hurting nose" part... slightly confused ^^;

Lol, when you said, "He had white, shiny hair. His hair looked silky to me." I totally pictured you going up to him and stroking his hair XD Kind of like what we do to Justin.

I already want to kill Belle! Gr... it sounded just like it would be in real life. And the part at the restaurant. I try to get people to behave, but it takes Zita's powerful voice to get them to stop. lol. Striking fear into people's hearts is always good...

Mysterious Zad dude should meet Hayden from Elements! lol. Fun with mysterious guys!

Dun dun dun. Who am I pointing too? !gasp! And I have to go eat breakfast! No!

Lol, very cool chapter. So only Tohru's hugs do anything? And I am very curious to see why Kyo was on the roof in the first place... and why he falls through it so often XD

Yes, I don't get enough time with Gary ^sigh^

Ah! Everything is going so well and then ends so badly! (with you fainting!)

Ah, so we are at a Ralston-like school, eh? Lol, I totally didn't get it until "Delculf" lol.

Good chapter!

Eps! The suspense of the letter! What will happen next? (good thing you've already posted chapter 2!) A great start! I feel like I already know the FB characters in person, even though I haven't read the manga!

Sorry it took me so long to read! I never check FanFiction XD

Anyways, only one comment thingy (since I know you want to improve) which is just when you said, "I’ll read it when I finish putting my stuff away I thought." and the first part was in italics, you could probably just say, "I figured that I'd read it when I finished putting my stuff away." Since you're writing in first-person, we already hear your thoughts, and italicizing thoughts is usually third person. What you're doing is totally fine, though, and not an error or anything that needs to be fixed. I just thought I'd mention it isn't necessary. ^^