This story reminded me quite a bit of some of Steven Spielberg's stories. All of it gave me a delightful feeling of horror and madness. I love the way it's drawn out. Something different from most of what I'm used to reading.

If this story is anything to go by, I'll be taking a look at your other stories soon too. Keep writing^^

Great story. I loved the sense of slowly encroaching madness for everybody involved in this story, and to me, near the end, it seemed like that madness would start sneaking in on me as well. I'll agree with you that your chapter 3 seemed a little forced, but compared to the crap I write when I force myself onwards, it wasn't all that bad. Anyway, good luck on Dissection, and I hope that it keeps the same standard of work of everything else you've done.

Hello, Himonky

This was a very dark reading for me. I struggled to finish this in one sitting. Had to turn on all the lights in the room, and open the door to my dorm room to feel comfortable.

If you were trying for a feeling of horror in this story, you utterly succeded with me.

Your characterization of Kensuke seemed to be very well done, from my perspective. Gendo seemed over done, though. Rei's unshaved legs? Makes a person think about how she would have been dressed.

I first thought she would have been in her plugsuit, but then we would not have been able to have seen her legs.

Over all a good, if dark story. I now see why Jintsu recommended your stories to me.

Thank you for a time well-spent in your imagination.

(Please forgive any mistakes I may have made; English is not my primary language.)

Riko

Quite an interesting twist. A few minor spelling errors and usage of the wrong form of a word here and there, but nothing too serious.

Good work here.

Nice ending, interesting version of instrumentality and everything was rounded off nicely yet left open which is true to Eva I feel.

I agree with you on Gendo he is interesting and possibly not as much of a bad guy as is made out to be despite what he does. However on the flipside he is a complete bastard as well so it can go either way.

Anyway I enjoyed the final chapter and look forward to seeing more work from you. It was an interesting fic and I'm sure the last chapters name is a reference to Dream Theater.

Hi,

All I can really say is that the ending was worth it...very much so. very much an interesting concept on instrumentality...

Either way, it delivers what it promised on the first chapter...

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Dartz IRL

Very good chapter, you know it's strange I never really thought of Kensuke as an interesting character but you've been able to make him interesting and gave a good insight into how he might think in such a situation.

A few things cleared up, nice use of the dream sequences. We can see Asuka confronting Gendo. Touji making his decision to join NERV and Shinji's death. Looking forward to seeing more of what happened and what lead to Shinji going berserk.

Looking forward to the next one, oh and about the length of time don't rush yourself. Just take your time with it and get out the best you think you can do.

Thanks for mentioning the C2 as well :)

Hi,

Seriously man, don't rush it or push to get it done. Doing too much too fast will just ruin what looks to be a very interesting ending.

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Dartz IRL

damn, that was intence...the whole flashback with Shinji thew me for a loop, but I eventully caught on. good fic!

I agree with you about the beginning of this chapter. It did not really draw me in, yet I kept reading knowing that there would be treat at the end. I'm glad you did not disappoint. You finished this chapter off with a nice little 'dream' that leaves me wanting more. Overall, even though I am not the best with grammar, so far I haven't noticed anything that sticks out.
I can't wait to see how this will end, and hopefully you will finish it, unlike some of the other stories I have read that stop right when it is getting good.

Great story so far. I can't wait until the next chapter.

Intresting that all of this happened after instrumentality( probly spelled wrong) I wonder will Ken start going crazy. Touji will probably be recruited and maybe die. Maybe somethinfg between Hikari and Kenskue. Be nice if Askua killed Gendo after showing evidence that he was responsible to Rei. The flashbacks were written well.

This is interesting - I liked Kensuke, even though he was an extreme nerd (maybe even a dork). Having this quality tempered makes an convincing read. I was thrown, at first, because of the dream; still, cool execution.

Am looking forward to the next part; keep up the good work.

Wow, very good chapter there progressed the story well and introduced some interesting things. The OOC scenes didn't seem to OOC to be honest though, you said it had been a number of months so it made sense people change over time I doubt the Eva Pilots would be any exception.

I'm interested in learning why they're still being attacked by 'angels' though and what exactly did happen to Shinji. The whole dream sequence was intriguing and the funeral scene which followed carried a lot of emotion. Keep up the good work, looking forward to the next one.

Hi,

Good chapter. I can't say much more beyond that. You've got these hooks dangling dow for the reader to bite into, and I'll be damned if I haven't swallowed them.

A lot of peaople alert fics and don't review them, it's normal, and usually because they have no idea what to say beyond screaming MOAR!