Heyy, great story! I can't beleive it, it had a really good plot and I'm definatly going to read more! I finally found a story worth reading. No offence, but I don't like the swearing, and that was about it. I know it was minor, but who cares LOL. Keep writing...(wait I'll check if you have another chapter)...no you dont.
Keep writing, please, even if I'm the only one who reads! It's really good. Oh, and the was one more part I didn't like...(checks what it is)...Oh, yea, it was the part about Gondor. I'm a Lord of the Rings fanatic, but it's really distracting, no offence. You seem very talented, and very creative.
This (as I have said) is one of the only stories, I found worth reading. The others I know are: (if you dont care that's okay ^_^) 'A New Age' , 'A Hatred of Born Scars' , and (my own LOL) 'The Pledge of Traitors.
These are all under action/adventure and or fantasy or suspense...I just thought you might like to know that. Wow, I've wrote a lot. I'll shut up now. KEEP WRITING!