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Reviews For: Shards

MilesTailsPrower-007 2008-06-17 ch 1,	abuseD: Poor Largo. That last line was really sad. I did think he had something of a fatherly angle, which was really interesting, considering his situation with his own family. I could actually imagine him sitting in that desk with the reading glasses, though, which is something of a feat! You handled it nicely.
Nips 2007-07-17 ch 1,	abuseThe God-Generals hardly interact with each other in-game, but if they did I imagine they would act much the same way you portray them. The way you write Largo is masterful; I like how his emotions are shown through action rather than speech and facial expression. I also liked the constant references to his size, such as the chair creaking and groaning. It's a fun mental picture. You did a great job capturing this solemn giant.
ChiByakko 2007-06-22 ch 1, anon.	abuseWow. I really enjoyed this. Largo is a great character, but I never expected to find a good fanfic centering on him. You really did a nice job of expressing his character in a sweet one-shot fic. Such a simple idea for a fic, and yet it says so much. Great work! ^_^
Gliblord 2007-06-19 ch 1,	abuseLargo is a fascinating character, and you proved more than apt to wrestle the hulk onto the page, which is quite a feat. I enjoyed the ending especially.
Story Weaver1 2007-02-11 ch 1,	abuseHuh that was quite interesting. Legretta meant to compliment him but instead hit a hidden nerve. All the god generals have issues but 'sync has more issues then all of them combined' that makes laugh even though I shouldn't. I liked the line about Dist. This is one of the few fics that doesn't star Jade. And it is still very good.
VilyaSage 2007-02-07 ch 1,	abuseGriff! This is awesome. ...Yes, I say that about everything you write, but I always mean it. I absolutely love that the pen snapped. It was the perfect way for Largo to get emotional without actually really needing to show emotion, or to speak with it. So great. I feel bad for Sync, too. And that's rare, hehe. But Arietta had him attacked! Gasp Do I really detect no Jade in here? How did you survive? But, you also write very good God-Generals. As in-character as always, and you and the depth to which you go in characters' minds has yet to stop amazing me. Write more! :)
Nirvana Fox 2007-02-07 ch 1,	abuseI like the way that ended. 'Everything he touched ended up broken...' That was a pretty deep insight on him. And I'm surprised. I think that this is a great fiction. The God-Generals deserve a little light, eh?
Exhile87 2007-02-07 ch 1,	abuseI'm not a fan of Largo (well actually I don't mind him...) but this was well written. I like the tiny bits of humour you had about Arietta's reaction towards Sync's nastiness. And that last part with Legretta was a pretty nice way of getting her into the story, huh? =D
Omniflyer 2007-02-06 ch 1,	abuseYay, you finished this! And I love the ending... that's such a wonderful line for Largo. Beautifully, beautifully haunting. If I wanted to nitpick inconsequentially, I would argue that in the line, "'Supposed to' was the key word," that's more a key phrase than word, but once we start hitting semantics like that, well... as Jade would say, "I'm quibbling." Nice work, though. I love Largo's reactions at the end. We don't ever see instances of him losing control, and yet you've portrayed it in such a manner that it doesn't come across as OOC, just as a deeper level of his character that, while we never saw it, remains utterly believable. Your ability to hold characters to realistic behaviour remains, perhaps, your strongest fanfiction skill, and you're using it marvelously. Another wonderful piece for the Abyss section. ...now all we need is an Abyss section. sighs
Akina Rose Sumora 2007-02-06 ch 1,	abuseOo, I like this. Arietta's been bad and Largo has to punish her! It's cute in a way. And I like his reaction at the end. Kinda makes you wonder...nah, I'd better not finish that thought. Keep up the good work, Natty, and I'll keep reading your fics if you read mine! (when I update it...)
Harada Risa 2007-02-06 ch 1, anon.	abuseAww, how sad. Anyway, you did a good job with the charaters...at least that's what I think..^^;
SoldierSteak 2007-02-06 ch 1,	abuseAw... Poor Largo. So underrated, so understood, and he always gets the shittiest ** end of the stick. : ( Nice last liner, that really fits with Largo's character. Excellent job once again.

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